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Tears of Sorrow(not finished yet-help!)
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Tears of Sorrow(not finished yet-help!) |
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Susie Junior Member
since 2002-12-19
Posts 36Illinois |
Do you ever feel like you don’t know where to go, You have nowhere to hide, But you don’t want to show. All you can do is cry, But no one’s shoulder is nearby. You feel like you’re falling down the deepest hole, You feel as if you have no soul. You’re left alone, No emotions shown. No one understands That you know what you did was bad. You know your doings were wrong, And you now all trust is gone for long. Have you ever felt lost, Because of the line too soon crossed? Just one kiss can lead to Just one touch, And just one touch Can lead to way too much. Just one drag of just one square Can lead to drags of so much more. Your face is smothered with tears, Your heart cries But no one hears. You’re sorry for all you did, But now all people think is, “What a messed up kid!” How can I show that I’m sorry? How can I have people trust me? My eyes are filled with water, I’m no longer wanted as a daughter. I don’t know what to do next, Pleading for forgiveness is useless. Tears are falling, Hear my calling |
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frolicking dolphin Member
since 2003-02-23
Posts 268my own special world |
That seemed very touching, do you want to add to it or just change what you had, because that by itself is a beautiful poem, although it is sad. Karen |
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Susie Junior Member
since 2002-12-19
Posts 36Illinois |
Karen~I wanted to add to it unless there is anything that you think needs change but I just don't know how I should end it do you have any suggestions?and thanx for your reply! |
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BrokenDreams Member
since 2003-02-09
Posts 425In The Clouds |
this is reaslly sad. i can really relate. i don't think i would change anything-its good the way it is. Jenn think about this: everyone you know will someday die. |
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frolicking dolphin Member
since 2003-02-23
Posts 268my own special world |
I think I would agree with Jenn, it's good the way it is. Karen |
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