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palmerj Junior Member
since 2002-11-06
Posts 30Coxsackie, NY |
It's been a while since posting and I'm thinking of giving this to my ex whom I now am starting to have feelings for again.Let me know whay you think. Long nights come and go, But the memories still remain intact. Some appear in shades of white and black Somewhat blurred but clear as day. Often my favorite appears. Nervousness struck on the long walk As butterflies fluttered when sitting at the old picnic table Far in the distance I caught glance of you chasing pop-ups and ground balls. It was warm but you wore long sleeves; Old, worn and maroon in color. I can't recall you wearing it again. I was shaking and searching for words to communicate my silent passion. You walked over and smiled like an angel. My heart began to sink like the titanic, While stuttering the feelings I kept from you. The hug I received was better then anything You could ever give me again. Not all memories are so sugar coated and I recall once wishing to forget them all. But looking back now I'm glad I had no genie. For this one sweet memory of you helps forget all those that are sour. [This message has been edited by palmerj (02-24-2003 12:21 AM).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked the poem a lot, especially the ending. I think it's definitely a great thing to give to somebody, but the circumstance you're currently in might call for other actions. If he's your X, it might scare him. You never know how a person will react to the passionate words that might easily flow from your pen. It's a complicated situation, but good luck and once again GREAT POEM.  Look at the sun and burn your eyes. You'll be fine in the end. |
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