Teen Poetry #6 |
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To Sean |
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Cinderelly Member
since 2001-12-31
Posts 189NM, USA |
Two months from now, 3 years will come to an end. The day I wished away, will come in May. Two months from now, my heart will break. Because you will walk across that stage, on May 28th. Two months from now, goodbye will finally be said. +Suggestions needed+ -Jamie |
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since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
You have a great beging here! I would definitly expand upon this, perhaps just a few more stanza's. It is very well written so far and anybody who is reaching this time in there life or has already gone through it knows of what you speak! Well done on that account! I would add to this you express yourself well but try adding a little more emotional words to let the reader really feel what you are feeling! Overall nicely done. ~Live and Laugh~ People always ask me why I don't look toward my future I tell them to many interesting things are happening today. |
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