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MissKlarmic
Member

since 2003-02-20

Posts 70
Canada,N.S

0 posted 2003-02-20 02:10 PM

He was a naked soul that seemed forever wronged
Shatteringly sad that i couldn't see in his eyes
An emotionally loaded , hostile observer who would take in every tiny element
His soul looked radiant with a ravishingly lovely hum about it
Troubles, tears a world away hopes and fears always being saved for another day
Hi stays on my ming my thoughts and my dreams
My foggy view clouded by this scrawled cover up
Quiet he is as a comparator on his own
Quiet he seems to live diverged by all
Not a hatemonger , nor living by hegemony
hesitantly i`d say irrational , knowing the past is irrecoverable.
Yet the way i feel is irrecusable,irremissible and irremovable.
Love as defined is
" A great feeling of fondness and friendship,affection or devotion,selfless care and concern."
Love as defined is what i feel for him
By now it is more.
I`m a lovelorn fool
Sticking to measureless fondness for him.and him alone.
possibly these words are meaningless to him
Yet to me modal to my heart.
There is no obligation to a response I wish his mind to be a perspicacious one
For if so much is unknown in my head how could my heart persuade my mind of what it truly feels.of wanting to be with him and actually being with him.
Though it seems and it is as it seems nothing else seems as perused in my mind than the thought of it.
I have sent a million words to you none meaning as much as these.
this is important to me , important for you to hear, more important for you to know.

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

1 posted 2003-02-20 05:15 PM

(big hugggsssssss) I hope with all my heart this special somebody hears your hearts yearning, sweet friend, I can understand the frustration and hope your heart is fulfilled with that elusive reply! (sigh) This is poignant, sweet friend, I send prayers and my vote your way, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

2 posted 2003-02-20 11:46 PM

This is very sad. You wrote it with lots of emotion......

Hugs from,
Ethel....garysgirl

Chanson
Senior Member

since 2000-08-19

Posts 1559
Up Creek w/Out Paddle

3 posted 2003-02-22 11:24 PM

This is very touching, Miss K. *s

When you think you have heard it all,
listen more closely.
~Dorene

frolicking dolphin
Member

since 2003-02-23

Posts 268
my own special world

4 posted 2003-02-25 03:20 PM

Wonderfully written with tons of emotion.

~*~Karen~*~

~Dream like you'll live forever,live like you'll die tomorrow~

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

5 posted 2003-02-25 06:50 PM

You know this is a wonderful character study poem, and I felt I knew him. Your writing has extremely good depth to it, and I sure enjoyed this one.

~* Carpe' Diem *~

carol
Senior Member

since 2003-01-25

Posts 624
Florida USA

6 posted 2003-04-20 01:06 PM

This is really good but so sad

Real friends celebrate in who we are and have faith in all that we can become
Lots of Love
Rita

A.L
Member

since 2003-03-15

Posts 131

7 posted 2003-04-20 06:07 PM

this was a good poem... I hope he knows how you feel now

Jeremy Halstead
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A

8 posted 2003-04-21 12:30 PM

This is truly one of the better poems I've read in some time. That's just as well also, for had it not been, my insight to this little piece of you would not be. This work could be studied and learned from...truly...I loved it...btw, I believe this man would be a fool to at least not keep a place in his heart just for you.

J.H.

Be it in the truest form, or a desperate lack thereof, fail not to understand that the inspiration is love.

SilentTears
Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 371
Lost and Broken

9 posted 2003-04-21 07:05 PM

This is a very beautiful poem. You had really good feeling and a good use of words. Nice job! Ya got my vote!

As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me

sing'n fool
Member

since 2003-04-17

Posts 82
Morris, Il

10 posted 2003-04-25 02:53 AM

your particular usage of words captures the essences of your mind perfectly...awsome stuff.

M.P.D.

Be yourself. Say what you feel. Nothing is wrong. To your own self be real!!

aaron woodside
Member

since 2001-09-26

Posts 256

11 posted 2003-04-26 04:46 PM

Very nice hope to see more from you soon.

ex animo,
Aaron Woodside

IN NOMINE PATRI ET FILII ET SPIRITUS SANCTI

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

12 posted 2003-04-27 12:33 PM

Very strong poem!!
I was drawn right in from the first line,
my vote on this one,
Well done!!

WinterWren
"Even a fool knows that we cannot touch the stars, but that doesn't keep the wise from trying."

WindSong
Member

since 2002-12-23

Posts 313
Long Island, New York

13 posted 2003-04-27 08:51 PM

You got my vote. Breathtaking, stunning words enveloped my mind like a glass of orange juice being poured. (Couldn't think of anything else). But, this was great. I loved every line of it, and to top it off, I felt that way about someone for a long long long long long long long long long long long long long long...etc...etc...TIME.
I mean a LOOOOOOOOOOOOONG time. Great job! ~*~Kirah~*~ PS...going in library...

I lie all the time - infact Im lieing right now!
Today is yesterdays tomorrow.

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