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Teen Poetry #6

I Have Arrived

Obsolete
Junior Member

since 2003-06-27

Posts 43

0 posted 2003-07-07 03:09 PM

I have arrived,
In this new white palace
(I have no chains)
Last night,
I slept here
Enjoying the crisp sheets,
Loving the cool air
While I struggle to remain,
It's comforting to know...
Whatever happens,
I did it without you.

Song_for_Serenity
Member

since 2003-05-28

Posts 97
USA

1 posted 2003-07-07 03:30 PM

This was interesting. Short, sweet, to the point. Great write. Keep up the good work. Have a spiffy day!

~Angela
"Anything less than mad, passionate love is wasting your time...Life has too many mediocre things in it, love shouldn't be one of them..."

Savage Quiescence
Member

since 2002-07-29

Posts 326
Wandering

2 posted 2003-07-07 09:10 PM

I love the mood. It has attitude without being harsh. Good write

~Sky

"Whatever life brings, I've been through everything, but now I'm on my knees again" -Creed

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

3 posted 2003-07-08 12:02 PM

ooo...refreshingly well done.
I loved this.
~Lex

Skyfire

Member Elite

since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

4 posted 2003-07-08 01:13 AM

Booyah!! (the "I did it without you" part... actually the entire thing

)

Skyfire owns you - Stinky Twinky

dertah
Senior Member

since 2003-06-18

Posts 584

5 posted 2003-07-08 12:16 PM

haha, i laugh like french man, and say nice work. and original too.

BrokenDreams
Member

since 2003-02-09

Posts 425
In The Clouds

6 posted 2003-07-08 12:40 PM

I'm glad you had the courage and power to break free of whatever was holding you back. Dang, that was wordy. LoL. Nice write.

-Jen

I'd rather be hated for who I am than loved for who I am not. -Kurt Cobain

Obsolete
Junior Member

since 2003-06-27

Posts 43

7 posted 2003-07-08 01:41 PM

Many thanks.

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