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PrincessNets Member
since 2002-10-30
Posts 103NewYork, USA |
Sitting alone in the dark I think of you. Of all you know about me And all I know about you. It makes me sad when I think of All the time we spend apart. Hoping this will all come To a close soon, That I might be With you again. I cry myself to sleep Without you by my side. I miss you so much I just can’t handle it My heart cries out to you And leaves me in pain. All the lonely tears that I cry Won’t help at all, But lonely tears shall I cry, Till I might be with you. I wrote this one summer when I had to spend the entire summer at my father's away from the boy that I was in love with at the time.... hope you enjoyed it (I did revise it a little, so it is not the complete original, but I feel that this one is better). |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I'm doing the same -- going back to my old old stuff (and boy does that modifier fit!)...and finding and polishing some gems that I just wasn't mature enough as a writer to do justice, when I had the inspiration. It's a good thing to do, I think -- teaches you about yourself, and can really give your confidence a boost when you find buried treasure. Like this one. Well done! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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PrincessNets Member
since 2002-10-30
Posts 103NewYork, USA |
Thanks a lot Ratleader... I appreciate the honesty and the advice. I am glad that I am not the only one who likes to go to my old stuff and adjust the ones that I think could be better and go farther. -Jeanette- |
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LegalSecret69 Member
since 2003-06-04
Posts 69Virginia |
This is sad, but sweet....so much passion. good job  |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I've put some of them to good use -- the shell of this poem, maybe half of the text, is something I wrote 30 years ago.....but it so applied to something I wanted to say now, and I just used myself, then, as a scaffold to let me reach higher now. /pip/Forum79/HTML/001142.html ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Kaydo Junior Member
since 2003-06-02
Posts 17Washington, USA |
WOW!!! Where to start... I love how the poem conveyed your emotions (at the time). It was well written and i hope to read more of your poetry! Wonderful job. Work like you don't need the moeny, dance like no one is watching, and love like you've never been hurt. |
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morgansmiles Junior Member
since 2003-06-11
Posts 25hicksville |
Hey jeanette......dont be sad....i know your feelings.....i go through the same thing everyday with "you know who" so just grin and laugh...it makes the tears dry up and the good times roll lol! |
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SilentTears Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 371Lost and Broken |
Wow...I really like this poem. I can really relate to it at the time, as well. You see, my parents are the reason I cannot see the one that I am in love with...they don't like him, so they're keeping me from him. This poem really hit home. Very beautiful...I like it a lot! As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me |
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frolicking dolphin Member
since 2003-02-23
Posts 268my own special world |
I love this poem and I am also going through a time in my life when I cannot see the boy that I love because of conflicts, but this was a very well written poem. ~*~Karen~*~ |
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xEmperorEmber Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 136tx |
i know how you feel i dated a girl once with a pace maker, and her battery went dead.. and so did she. So at her funeral i threw a duracell on her coffin.....  |
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