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OtherSideOfTheMirror Member
since 2002-12-19
Posts 245
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Oh galaxy light This moon of ours Don't let me forget To count all these stars Oh merciful nightfall Forgive me alone Oh darkness in the heavens Am I on my own? And if I should die here tonight I hope on you There be no struggle nor fight Oh merciful life Forgive me again For now I am here And will never be slain My heart is pure My soul yours to keep And I'm lost in the stars In this darkness so deep. |
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aaron woodside Member
since 2001-09-26
Posts 256 |
This was good. I'm very picky about the night sky and the moon, stars, and such and usually I don't like what other people say about them. I did like this though. It reminded me of a bedtime prayer though or a little bedtime rhyme. Not sure if that's the intent you were going for but I really think my little sister would love to have this read to her at night. ex animo, Aaron Woodside IN NOMINE PATRI ET FILII ET SPIRITUS SANCTI |
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aaron woodside Member
since 2001-09-26
Posts 256 |
P.S. I hope you don't find that insulting. I've told someone else that I thought their poem would make a good bedtime story and they almost bit my head off. ex animo, Aaron Woodside IN NOMINE PATRI ET FILII ET SPIRITUS SANCTI |
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OtherSideOfTheMirror Member
since 2002-12-19
Posts 245 |
OMG CRAZY You won't believe it but... THAT'S EXACTLY WHAT I WAS THINKING!!! You know that poem thing, "And if I die before I wake..." well it always scared me to say that before I went to bed... so last night I couldn't sleep and I wrote this instead!!! I'm not easily insulted... but thanks for caring! And thanks for responding. |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
Yet another well written piece! I like the flow of this one a lot it all just kinda fits together you know? Anyways I like the thoughts that it put in my head, very peaceful, joyful almost..well done! People always ask me why I don't look toward my future I tell them to many interesting things are happening today. |
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