Teen Poetry #6 |
Enchanting romance |
ShadyMakaveli Member
since 2002-08-21
Posts 128 |
Fantasies of a life with you Spending time with you, my love grew Feelings strong, no longer containable How I feel is unexplainable Wondering if I even have a chance Promise you a life of romance Give me one opportunity See how much you mean to me I will not fail, my love will prevail A love story meant to be a fairytale Not a book, this is real Not lying about how I feel Do you feel the same way Pronounce your love, I'm here to stay |
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ShadyMakaveli Member
since 2002-08-21
Posts 128 |
anyone got anything to say? |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
This is alright... once again you've used your usual style of aabb rhyme. Another thing that bugs me is how you clumped it into one stanza. Divide the lines and diversify the rhymes. It will be a lot better in the end, trust me. That's all I have to say really. Parasite Learn to place poetry before people |
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