Teen Poetry #6 |
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Dead of Night (Updated) |
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Cinderelly Member
since 2001-12-31
Posts 189NM, USA |
In the dead of night, as the crickets sang, tears fell upon my pillow. The morning hour approached, as shadows searched, branchs swayed and hope went out the window. In the mignight hour, as the silence strangles life became more clear. That time in the dead of night, death came near. - This is nowhere near done but I'm stuck! Help! - |
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PoetryIsLife![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Do you want crituqes? It says you're nuetral on the subject, but your asking for thoughts says yes, you do want them. Just curious. ![]() I personally LOVED this piece. ![]() ![]() ~Titus Es ist gut, daß das Leben die Toten studieren sollte. |
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Cinderelly Member
since 2001-12-31
Posts 189NM, USA |
I love critiques . . . It's always nice to know what people think of my poetry. Thanks for your comments and I'm still working on this, so I'm not so sure about the death line . . . |
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