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WindSong
Member

since 2002-12-23

Posts 313
Long Island, New York

0 posted 2003-01-23 10:20 AM

~*English...Movie...Boredem...Need I say more?...I just felt like writing so that's what I did...*~

Looking out the window,
in the bitter cold, I see your face.
Breathing emotionless, expressionless.
A solemn smile, that's all.
Staring straight at me, your remorseful eyes
No words from your mouth, no movement from your body
An indignant stare from the outside.
You can't ignore me, you want me to hurt.
You can't stand to see me smile.
The anger you possess is taking over your mind.
I can't help you any longer, I'm looking away
Fade in the wind.
For a moment I saw you, but it was only the wind.

~*It's kind of like...Peanut butter and jelly...Kidding. I dunno. I've been in kind of a numb mode lately. Just stress I guess. Many important things in my life. But, I thought this one was kind of different from my other work...I hope you like it...*~

*Mistakes are made, you pay for them, then you do it again.*
~*~Love doesn't make the world go 'round, it just makes the ride worthwhile~*~

[This message has been edited by WindSong (01-23-2003 10:25 AM).]

Darkness
Member

since 2002-10-17

Posts 202
The place just beyond my eyes, where my spirit flies.

1 posted 2003-01-23 11:54 AM

This was a really cool piece. I liked how you just shrugged it off at the end and concluded that it was just the wind.

~*Study Hall... Library... Boredom... Thanks for the read!*~

Darkness

BabieDoll
Member

since 2003-02-13

Posts 268
BFE

2 posted 2003-02-15 07:26 PM

This poem was magnificant! I loved it, absolutely loved it. I cannot really explain it...it pretty much baffled me. This is one of the good poems I have read in a while! Great job!

~J.Lynn

"In life you must dance like no one is watching, sing like no one is listening and love like it's never going to hurt..."

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

3 posted 2003-02-16 11:33 PM

Oohh, I really like this one! Wonderful wonderful wonderful. Graphic descriptions.
I especially loved the line, "An indignant stare from the outside."
Great Job! (as usual)

WinterWren
"Even a fool knows that we cannot touch the stars, but that doesn't keep the wise from trying."

NSnaomian
Member

since 2002-07-22

Posts 232
In my troll closet I be

4 posted 2003-02-17 09:37 PM

"A solemn smile, that's all.
Staring straight at me, your remorseful eyes"
Absolutely love this! Very great images back this up and its wonderful...oh what a boring class can inspire.
Laura

"All that I desire to point out is the general principle that Life imitates Art far more than Art imitates Life."
-Oscar Wilde

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