Storm(my first published poem)

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IndigoEve
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since 2003-01-10

Posts 279
Etched in the illusion of time

0 posted 2003-01-18 11:06 AM

I wrote this one back in about October...It's one of my olde ones....But, I hope you enjoy.

The sky grows ominous
There is something dangerous in the air
The trees quiver in fear
Frightened by the howls of the wind

The air begins to thicken
Smothering the land in a wet cloak
An angry rumbling fills the air
As the sky spills its rage

Like an unruly child
The fuming clouds can no longer be contained
Threatening to unleash what they so tightly hold
They descend on the trembling land

A flaming sword slashes the clouds
Spilling out all that they hold
Rain falls like the tears of a repentant sinner
Until the sun arrives to forgive and console

Peace returns to the earth
Trees stand tall as they once were
They sky has lost all fury
And endangers earth no more

Kellie_Cantrell
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since 2002-05-22

Posts 1667
New York

1 posted 2003-01-18 01:20 PM

this poem is really good.

Jaime

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Posts 250

2 posted 2003-01-18 07:26 PM

I like the pictures you painted with this one. Very nice.

- Jaime

Shiva went on break now look at how much it's gonna take to make this place a space where we can breathe.

idleeyes86
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since 2003-06-09

Posts 64
Somewhere over the rainbow

3 posted 2003-06-17 03:39 PM

Absolutely beautiful and I'm not at all surprised it was published but...having read a few of your others if I'm honest I wouldn't have picked this as the best one

kadafi09
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since 2003-06-17

Posts 143
California, United States

4 posted 2003-06-17 07:07 PM

beautiful use of imagery to give us all the image of a storm
this poem reminds me of stuff i read in the AP English Literature Examination that i took last month
i loved it

IndigoEve
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since 2003-01-10

Posts 279
Etched in the illusion of time

5 posted 2003-06-19 10:40 AM

I'd have forgotten about this one if no one had bumped it! Thanks...I agree, idleeyes...I definately think all my others are much better than this. It only goes to show how much I've changed as a poet since October.

[This message has been edited by IndigoEve (06-19-2003 10:41 AM).]

rapturedmist
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since 2003-06-23

Posts 30
USA

6 posted 2003-06-26 04:37 AM

after reading some of your pieces... [sorry i didn't post on all of them] you've become one of my favorties on here. : ) keep up the great work!
-RM

BrokenDreams
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since 2003-02-09

Posts 425
In The Clouds

7 posted 2003-06-27 01:38 PM

"A flaming sword slashes the clouds
Spilling out all that they hold
Rain falls like the tears of a repentant sinner
Until the sun arrives to forgive and console"

This is my favorite stanza, although the whole thing is really good. Nice job.

-Jen

I'd rather be hated for who I am than loved for who I am not. -Kurt Cobain

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