Teen Poetry #6 |
Just Not There (repost) |
NSnaomian Member
since 2002-07-22
Posts 232In my troll closet I be |
The last time I posted this I didn't get feedback and I just thought I'd put it up here again... Wishing wonders in an endless stream. Blue turned to purple through kaliedoscope-magic air. Falling fountains in a free-for-all daze. Trimmed persona filled water slides by in a sleeping state. Mystical aura mountains peak as sky's the limit. A weeping-souled tree hangs in perfect alliance with its god. Restrained and hidden soul observes endless dreamy scenes. My gentle stunned heart surrounded in a glorious view. "All that I desire to point out is the general principle that Life imitates Art far more than Art imitates Life." |
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Trouble Breathing Member
since 2002-11-12
Posts 63 |
you use alot of big words..and sometimes that can backfire on people, but that isn't the case this time. Very well written |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Laura~ This is a beautifully written piece and you've included some lovely imagery. I enjoyed reading this...nicely done. ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
This is a 'pretty' read and very nicely put forth. Well done indeed. If we traveled backwards, from end to beginning, would the road, I wonder |
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NSnaomian Member
since 2002-07-22
Posts 232In my troll closet I be |
Thank you all for your replies, it does help a lot to know what people are thinking. Thanks again Laura "All that I desire to point out is the general principle that Life imitates Art far more than Art imitates Life." |
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