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Moving On (repost)

Chel2082
Junior Member

since 2002-07-23

Posts 40
Baltimore, MD

0 posted 2003-01-16 11:13 AM

As I look into your eyes and hear you say
Will you do me this favor
I can't yes, I say what is it?
We have been friends forever, right?
So why is now any different?

After thinking about it for a while
I decided to say no
If I knew it was going to ruin our friendship
I wouldn't have even thought about it
Now I have lost you forever

Maybe our friendship wasn't meant to be
But why did you try to force me?
Is that all I am worth to you?
Because we have been friends for 9 years I am just supposed to do this thing
Instead I am being let go

Moving on will be hard because of our history
Moving on will be easier because of your decision
Moving on is the way of life
People come and go so now
I am moving on

With GOD all things are possible, true friends stab you in the front...~*CHEL*~

NSnaomian
Member

since 2002-07-22

Posts 232
In my troll closet I be

1 posted 2003-01-17 11:30 AM

I like the story in this, however, it doesn't seem to flow so well. Maybe you could restructure your lines a bit and play with it some..it can be much better, but I like it.
Laura

"All that I desire to point out is the general principle that Life imitates Art far more than Art imitates Life."
-Oscar Wilde

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