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CwboyAtHeart
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 541
Selah, WA, USA

0 posted 2003-01-10 08:37 PM

Alright, this is very very far from my best work, but I've been sick for 3 weeks, haven't written for over a month, so I'm trying to get my mind back into the "writing thinking" thing. So, this is an attempt at getting out of my writers block. Let me know what you think.

UNTITLED

It can break you
It can make you
It can put you together
It can tear you apart

When everything’s wrong
Love can make it all right
If you ever fall down
It can pick you back up

It can scare you
It can soothe you
It can stand you still
It can push you away

When life’s turned upside down
Love can turn it back around
If a smile’s stuck on your heart
Love has surely found you

      - Cody -

Note To Self:  If Pigs Can Fly, So Can I!!!

If someboy laughs at me, does that make me funny or just plain stupid?

OtherSideOfTheMirror
Member

since 2002-12-19

Posts 245

1 posted 2003-01-10 08:49 PM

Wow if that's far from your best work, then I need to read up on you. That was exquisite! (wow i love that word)

rxyfxy04
Member

since 2002-11-26

Posts 54
lil' town in Virginia

2 posted 2003-01-10 10:05 PM

whoa.. that was really good.. u made me miss being in love

and im glad u got off writers block.. VERY good comeback! keep it up..i look forward to reading others from you..

RxyFxy04

jeffwillett
Member

since 2003-01-04

Posts 86
Texas, US

3 posted 2003-01-10 11:09 PM

Ahhh, much better than the one i just read...the flow was much better than the previous one i read...very good

*Belabebeautiful*

Senior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

4 posted 2003-01-11 09:50 PM

Oh wow!! I really like this one!! I like it better than the other one that you posted I just read it and it was good but this was great!! I was smiling at the end of the poem and if a writer can influence the reader enough to feel the emotion then he's doing a good job! You write lovely and this poem flowed very well I look foword to reading more!

Live and laugh and make sure to always have Bella Amor (beautiful love)
~Bella~

aries_luv_ppl
Senior Member

since 2001-09-20

Posts 1448
Universal Mind

5 posted 2003-01-11 10:17 PM

I love the second and fourth stanze

Maybe I am not praying...but I know...
You are always listening...to my soul...

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

6 posted 2003-01-11 10:39 PM

I liked this one alot! It was very good, exploring the different aspects of love, this has been done before, but every time it's done again it's different. I like the way you did this poem, Well done again!

WinterWren
"I want you to believe in life. Will you find out who you are too late, to change?" -Dishwalla-

mindy
Junior Member

since 2002-12-18

Posts 34
VA, US

7 posted 2003-01-12 03:21 PM

This is really good...I'm glad to say that I've experienced a smile stuck on my heart...that was the best description!

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

8 posted 2003-01-15 05:50 PM

Cody~
Once again, your poetry has me smiling.
I enjoyed this one very much.
Nicely done.
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

WindSong
Member

since 2002-12-23

Posts 313
Long Island, New York

9 posted 2003-01-15 09:44 PM

I've never read any of your work...But this is beautiful. I think I'll be reading a lot more of your work because this absolutely a great piece! Great describing of love, I can't seem to figure out a definition of it but it looks like you have through poetry. Truly magnificant! (I don't think that thats the right spelling.) Peace! ~*~Kirah~*~ PS....going in my library!

*Mistakes are made, you pay for them, then you do it again.*
~*~Love doesn't make the world go 'round, it just makes the ride worthwhile~*~

Riley

Senior Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

10 posted 2003-01-16 08:24 AM

quote:
Cody~
Once again, your poetry has me smiling.

hehe smile on vicky.

Good job, usually I don't like the repeating it's, but this one made sense.

Morning mist clings to my face, and my soul opens up to you......

Susie
Junior Member

since 2002-12-19

Posts 36
Illinois

11 posted 2003-01-16 08:34 AM

WOW!i really felt this poem!i love how you described everything that love is, the good and the bad, but in the end it's always good.great job!

IndigoEve
Member

since 2003-01-10

Posts 279
Etched in the illusion of time

12 posted 2003-01-16 12:11 PM

That was a really good poem. it flowed well, and it was a wonderful first read for me!

PoetryIsLife

Senior Member

since 2001-10-27

Posts 1763
...in my boxers...

13 posted 2003-01-18 01:25 AM

Hey, cowboy.

Remember me? I remember you.

This is a great piece of poetry. I like it's simplicity. It was very enjoyable to read.

~Titus

"A life unexamined is not worth living."
-Socrates

Kellie_Cantrell
Senior Member

since 2002-05-22

Posts 1667
New York

14 posted 2003-01-18 01:23 PM

reminds me kinda of eminems lose yourself, the poem is still real good though.

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