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HeroicVillan
Junior Member

since 2002-11-09

Posts 34
Lost.....

0 posted 2003-01-08 08:10 PM

this is just the beginning, i plan to write more, so if you have any suggestions, please let me know...

no hit wonder

the look in their eyes, i think its shame.
same from my parents, its always the same.
they all think ive failed, and maybe theyre right.
staring straight, unblinking, i gaze at the night.

no one even knows me, what i truly am.
im sure they dont get me, a sheperds lost lamb.
more like a wolf, my barks worse than my bite,
but i would still, Never... run from a fight.

still with this lonely sky i sit under,
its clear to me, that im a no hit wonder.
and yet, with all the things that ive lost,
know ill keep on going, forget about the cost...

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

1 posted 2003-01-08 08:15 PM

woah. i can really relate to this. i know alot of people say that, but i seriously mean it when i say it. i liked this alot. yeah i think if u added on to it, it would be even better. good write.

If You Wanna See A Rainbow, You've Gotta Live Through The Rain. And If You Wanna See Through Love, You've Gotta Live Through The Pain.

rimmie
Junior Member

since 2002-08-09

Posts 45
Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada

2 posted 2003-01-08 09:08 PM

Well done I LOVE it!

BabyHuey
New Member

since 2002-11-09

Posts 2

3 posted 2003-01-08 09:25 PM

wow, this was excellent, it was a great first post. im really looking forward to reading some more, be sure to write again.

foreverwithyou
Member

since 2002-10-20

Posts 204
Wonderland

4 posted 2003-01-08 10:02 PM

hey this was really good the end didnt wrap it all up i thought it was so good that i wanted there to be more!!but this was a really good first post nice job!!!

    P.S. if u want to email me or IM me on AIM (or if anyone does)my sn is dancinnancies44
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"I am who I am who I am who am I?"

Susie
Junior Member

since 2002-12-19

Posts 36
Illinois

5 posted 2003-01-09 08:50 AM

That was GREAT!!!I have 2 admit that i can totally relate 2 that.keep postin~i look forward 2 keep readin them!!

Marshalzu

Member Elite

since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

6 posted 2003-01-09 09:07 AM

Welcome to Passions

I really enjoyed reading your first post, it was very well written and I can identify where you are coming from. Hopefully we will see more of you work soon.

Andrew

Cats playing bagpipes and bugles

Android 17

Senior Member

since 2001-07-21

Posts 664
Winnipeg

7 posted 2003-01-09 03:47 PM

What a modest, yet stunning, entrace, my friend. Be sure to stick around, and show us some more of your great work!

jeffwillett
Member

since 2003-01-04

Posts 86
Texas, US

8 posted 2003-01-09 06:55 PM

nice poem, i like the subject matter

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