Teen Poetry #6 |
Death of the Heart |
Knight of Arendia New Member
since 2003-01-07
Posts 3 |
I said I hated you That I never wanted to see you again I wanted you to disappear But I never wanted this I was angry and misinformed I didn't mean the words I said I guess you knew all along 'Cuz you came back to me But before our happily ever after Even before we could give it a try You're leaving me again This time with a one-way ticket Fight, please! Please don't leave me here alone! I can't go on without you! Don't close your eyes! -the Knight of Arendia- |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
That was a very good first post, and welcome to passions! But I think you could have added alittle more at the end in my personal opinion. Well done though. WinterWren |
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Stinky Twinkie Member
since 2002-11-26
Posts 204Dinwiddie |
Good poem. You have an original style, or at least in the ones that I've read. You express emotions well. -Stinky Twinkie- |
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Susie Junior Member
since 2002-12-19
Posts 36Illinois |
that was a really good poem and thanx 4 ur reply 2 mine! |
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