Teen Poetry #6 |
Dark Rivers of the Heart |
WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
I wasn't going to post this one, cause Im really unsure about it, but I guess I am anyway. It's hard say exactly what depression is like, but I think this one comes pretty close. Trust is a pill I can't swallow, I try every day to make it But it won't go down. Scream, but there's no one to hear me. I stand on tear stained ground The rivers that flow were started by pain, And I can still hear the crying The echoes of so many lost souls wishing they were dying. My voice isn't loud enough to be heard I stand crushed within them. The river won't set me free, Im falling to my knees. And there I will stay till I break. My tears add too much to the river But I can't stop their flowing. So hollow within, So empty. Everywhere I look there's black My cry can't be heard. The darkness takes and keeps it. Im alone on this empty wasteland of sadness There's nothing I can touch, There's nothing here to feel. Im falling to my knees and screaming, And there I will stay till I break. You might not like this poem much if you don't have depression, even if you do you might think it's weird, I don't know why I posted it anyway. It's not too recent, in other words Im not that depressed right now. WinterWren |
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jeffwillett Member
since 2003-01-04
Posts 86Texas, US |
I can relate to the feelings here as a person who used to be cronically drepressed...not now, can't quite figure out why but im not complaining. nice feelings here, not my favorite poem but it definatly comands my respect. |
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PoeTik JusTice Member
since 2003-01-05
Posts 186California, USA |
I really do like this poem. I can totally relate to it, trust is a big problem for me, I have insecurities. Good work I must say! XoXo Love Alwayz XoXo |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
I can understand were you are coming from, I used to be very depressed myslef but I pulled through..I think that this poem was such a hard one and may sound funny to some people because it is about a dark emotion and it is hard to let those emotions out and be heard. I did like the poem though good job Live and laugh and make sure to always have Bella Amor (beautiful love) |
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WindSong Member
since 2002-12-23
Posts 313Long Island, New York |
I hate depression. It sucks!!! I liked this poem from you though. Helps to write when sick like that don't it? Good job..I'll be reading more later on this day...See ya ~*~ME~*~ *Mistakes are made, you pay for them, then you do it again.* |
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ShadyMakaveli Member
since 2002-08-21
Posts 128 |
Depression is something everyone can related to at one point and time in their life, and i liked this poem cause i was able to relate, maybe not cause of how i feel at this point and time but how i have felt in the past, thanx for sharing. |
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EleanorMoonbaby Member
since 2002-09-02
Posts 202England, UK |
This portrayed depression very well. I know it's a different experience for everyone, but you managed to get the universal feeling of depression in there. Nice one Ellie and her onions "I'm terribly sorry ma'am, my karma just ran over your dogma" |
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