Teen Poetry #6 |
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Dark Rivers of the Heart |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
I wasn't going to post this one, cause Im really unsure about it, but I guess I am anyway. It's hard say exactly what depression is like, but I think this one comes pretty close. Trust is a pill I can't swallow, I try every day to make it But it won't go down. Scream, but there's no one to hear me. I stand on tear stained ground The rivers that flow were started by pain, And I can still hear the crying The echoes of so many lost souls wishing they were dying. My voice isn't loud enough to be heard I stand crushed within them. The river won't set me free, Im falling to my knees. And there I will stay till I break. My tears add too much to the river But I can't stop their flowing. So hollow within, So empty. Everywhere I look there's black My cry can't be heard. The darkness takes and keeps it. Im alone on this empty wasteland of sadness There's nothing I can touch, There's nothing here to feel. Im falling to my knees and screaming, And there I will stay till I break. You might not like this poem much if you don't have depression, even if you do you might think it's weird, I don't know why I posted it anyway. It's not too recent, in other words Im not that depressed right now. WinterWren |
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jeffwillett Member
since 2003-01-04
Posts 86Texas, US |
I can relate to the feelings here as a person who used to be cronically drepressed...not now, can't quite figure out why but im not complaining. nice feelings here, not my favorite poem but it definatly comands my respect. |
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PoeTik JusTice Member
since 2003-01-05
Posts 186California, USA |
I really do like this poem. I can totally relate to it, trust is a big problem for me, I have insecurities. Good work I must say! ![]() XoXo Love Alwayz XoXo |
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*Belabebeautiful*![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
I can understand were you are coming from, I used to be very depressed myslef but I pulled through..I think that this poem was such a hard one and may sound funny to some people because it is about a dark emotion and it is hard to let those emotions out and be heard. I did like the poem though good job Live and laugh and make sure to always have Bella Amor (beautiful love) |
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WindSong Member
since 2002-12-23
Posts 313Long Island, New York |
I hate depression. It sucks!!! I liked this poem from you though. Helps to write when sick like that don't it? Good job..I'll be reading more later on this day...See ya ~*~ME~*~ *Mistakes are made, you pay for them, then you do it again.* |
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ShadyMakaveli Member
since 2002-08-21
Posts 128 |
Depression is something everyone can related to at one point and time in their life, and i liked this poem cause i was able to relate, maybe not cause of how i feel at this point and time but how i have felt in the past, thanx for sharing. |
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EleanorMoonbaby Member
since 2002-09-02
Posts 202England, UK |
This portrayed depression very well. I know it's a different experience for everyone, but you managed to get the universal feeling of depression in there. Nice one ![]() Ellie and her onions ![]() "I'm terribly sorry ma'am, my karma just ran over your dogma" |
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