Teen Poetry #6 |
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WindSong Member
since 2002-12-23
Posts 313Long Island, New York |
I wrote this in church this morning. Yes, that's how boring or long my church gets after a while. Actually I wrote two, but this is the one I want to post for the time being...The choir was singing some song and I just started writing. Luckily I ran out of room on my bulliten thing otherwise instead of a poem, I'd have a book. I'm not even sure I like it...What do you think? ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~ The sky opens up, Angels sing Stars glisten as does the moon over the water. Alone in the night, a warmth blows over me giving me comfort. I look up to see you standing there. You reach out your hand and take mine to rescue me from the night. Away we fly, hand in hand, never to be alone again. *Mistakes are made, you pay for them, then you do it again.* |
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wvplayernotreally Member
since 2002-11-06
Posts 215yakima wa |
I really liked this...whether or not your writing this about who I am thinking. But him reaching out his hand for you is a reality to many of us...good write...i enjoyed it. " I think I got a tan from the light in which i was basking." |
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Star T Member
since 2002-07-12
Posts 182Philadelphia, US |
hey i liked ur poem it was precise and really cool.but writing in church?a'int that something. |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
Another good one from you, thats all I expect now. Well done! WinterWren |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
*grin* I write on my hand when I have nothing else. At least in church they provide writing tools. Its much easier than screaming "I NEED A PEN!" lol... A good poem. Kielo I know only one thing, and that thing is that I know nothing. |
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PoeTik JusTice Member
since 2003-01-05
Posts 186California, USA |
I really liked this! Very beautiful...keep up the good work. XoXo Love Alwayz XoXo |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
Hey! very good poem! And I get the whole writing it in church thing I a lot of times find my insperation coming while I'm in the shower of all places! Talk about having a hard time writing anything down! Anyway it was a ver lovely poem and I can't wait to read the other one! Live and laugh and make sure to always have Bella Amor (beautiful love) |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
WindSong~ I'm liking this one lots. I really enjoyed the simplicity of this piece. Just a few brief words, but you conveyed some beautiful thoughts and tender feelings. Very nicely done. ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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