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Siren Song
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Siren Song |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
A beautiful siren sits alone Weaving her sad song through the clouds They come running, All the men who hear her call To fall at her feet Wishing for just one touch. All except the one she wants The one for whom she sings He doesn't hear her song. She doesn't want him to fall, She just wants him to stand by her side To share with each other the things they've seen in life. But he doesn't hear, And her song gets sadder still. Finally he looks her way Only to turn his back and walk away She gets up from her throne of mourning To dance in her showers of pain. No this isn't about me, it's sortof about a friend of mine. WinterWren |
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CloudedDreams Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 210My Fantasy Realm |
Man, I write a sad one and you love it, and you write an even sadder one and I love it. I really like this one. I feel this way sometimes...except for the other men falling at my feet... that never happens...lol Hope your friend's situation gets better! Have a wonderful day! Yes there will be tommorrow, but will you be there to greet it? |
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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571 |
Same here Clouded Dreams!!!I loved this poem. It was so beautifully written. You have a lot of talent! *Allison* "O My love |
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Rainbowdust Member
since 2002-12-05
Posts 320Sydney, Australia |
I've always been drawn to the story of the sirens and their mysterious allure. They're always portrayed as evil creatures though who woo seamen to their doom, and I've never read or seen anything written from their point of view. This was beautifully done.. and going straight into my library! The soul would have no rainbows, had the eyes no tears. |
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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind |
this is woven very beautifully! I love it! Eliza Simmons |
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Smoothy Member
since 2002-12-02
Posts 119The dark side of the moon |
Sad, romantic types, aren't we? I'm back again and this is something nice for me to return to. Well done. Love conquers all, so I must be in a losing battle. |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
Well, I don't know what to say but that I loved this. It's kinda how I feel often enough, but than again, my name says it all, dosen't it? I'd feel sorry for your friend, but to give pity is to insult them, so I'll just say I'm sorry things like that happen to anyone. The past year was like that for me somewhat. We are the sad romantic types, this I cannot deny. *~Rich~* "You can't hurt meee!! 'Cause I've got on my cheeeeese helmet!" |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
nicely done, 'twas sad, but the imagery was beautifull nonetheless! Are you scared? |
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Skyfire 
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Oooh, this hit me. Beautiful imagery and words. *smiles* |
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anawnda Member
since 2002-07-26
Posts 113 |
man i wish i was the one who wrote this, beatiful poem, i love it |
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Susie Junior Member
since 2002-12-19
Posts 36Illinois |
i also dont have mcuh 2 say bout it except that it was great and i LOVED it!!i think that every1 feels like that sometime in their life about one thing or another~i no i have and i felt like i was readin bout me!again~great job!! |
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WindSong Member
since 2002-12-23
Posts 313Long Island, New York |
I liked this, as I do many of your works. Easy to read and easy to understand...(That doesn't happen much for me..I get confused..ask anyone.) I liked how you were able to write about a friend, I can't do taht. It's gotta be about what I'm thinkin or doing...something I like...Good jkob....See ya! ~*~Kirah~*~ PS...putting in me library. :-) *Mistakes are made, you pay for them, then you do it again.* |
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