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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571
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I have lost you Before I`ve even found you I`ve fallen Before I`ve even reached the edge I`m in love And I`m not sure if I even know you Anymore I`m lost Lost in my own home I miss you And you haven`t even gone When will this end? You tell me to pretend But it`s not real It never will be real Why can`t this be real? I let you play me Me a fool I`m your puppet on a string Get caught up And I`m lost Again ____________________________________________________ This is kinda true..about me anyway..I hope people can relate to this..Cause otherwise I`m an idiot..well an idiot that has no other idiot to bond with..I should start an idiot socioty! We should be called..The Association of Amature thinking Socioty...ASS for short..LOL..srry if that has to be deleted..its not the real word tho..LOL Merry Christmas! "O My love Please don`t cry I`ll wash my bloody hands And well start a new life" -Good Charlotte [This message has been edited by devinechild22 (12-26-2002 12:43 AM).] |
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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571 |
O and P.S.....This is kinda a song so if it seems weird..That`s why! LOL *Allison* "O My love |
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Star T Member
since 2002-07-12
Posts 182Philadelphia, US |
hey that was really nice i liked it.i'd have made some corrections for u on putiing some commas but i myself have some problems with that.loved the poem anyway. |
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PoeticGoddessOfDepression Member
since 2002-07-02
Posts 439I am everywhere |
Ahhh!! Allison!!! When did you get so good!? (not that you weren't before but.. yea. u know what i mean) I'm so frickin jealous! Gosh, this is really really really really really really good! I want to write this! let's change the copywrite, i'll give you a buck..  lol my eye hurts.  good job, gal! (lol, i'm editing this now, a sec ago it said good 'jon' lol!!) keep writing!!! ~Sara “I make an impact on lives thru truth as well as lies. I overcome ur eyes +leave and etched memory forever. its my gift, my intentions are only well" [This message has been edited by PoeticGoddessOfDepression (12-26-2002 09:33 PM).] |
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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571 |
Sara,you have nothing to be jealous of. LOL Tomorrow is the ball!!!!! YAY!!I bought Cathy a bunch of junk!! LOL *Allison* "O My love Please don`t cry I`ll wash my bloody hands And well start a new life" -Good Charlotte [This message has been edited by devinechild22 (12-27-2002 05:13 PM).] |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Allison~ Lots of emotion in this write and you've expressed it very well. Great job on this one. Btw...great picture.  ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571 |
Thank you. I had some help from a friend LOL "O My love |
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dinky Member
since 2002-10-19
Posts 258 |
hey, this was really good. i liked it ~samantha~ "sometimes i just feel like |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
Nice job here. I was kinda wondering if it was a song when I was reading it. I was going to tell you that the repitition of "real" would sound really good if this were a song. I really enjoyed this piece! *Me* |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
Well, can't quite relate, but I liked it none the less. Yeah, I see what you mean about the song, I can put a rythm to it pretty easily, sorta like a punk rock kinda thing, not sure how to describe whats in my head.... well, I'm sure you got a better idea of how it goes than me; you wrote it! Well, later! "You can't hurt meee!! 'Cause I've got on my cheeeeese helmet!" |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
BTW. Did you try to IM me? cuz if you did, you should have my IM s/n. KhaosKnight2K2 Later! "You can't hurt meee!! 'Cause I've got on my cheeeeese helmet!" |
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LTEvans Member
since 2002-12-06
Posts 72Lenham, England |
Hmmm you annoy me this is far too good how dare you!!! At least pretend to find it difficult Solipsism saves us from the atavism of the Equalitarian. |
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WindSong Member
since 2002-12-23
Posts 313Long Island, New York |
I'll be part of your group, what was it ass?...I'm kind of in a situation like that now...My boyfriend and I are growing apart, well he thinks I'm ignoring him even when with him. So I Dunno if that's exactly what you're looking for...Anyway, I liked it a lot. It's pretty much how I felt the first time I went out this kid...Why did I do it again? Talking to much DOES get you somewhere. Great job! ~*~Me~*~ *Mistakes are made, you pay for them, then you do it again.* |
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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571 |
Rich-Yes I did try to im you once but as I did you signed off. Thank you for the reply. LTE-I`m sorry..I will write a terrible poem next.When I post a new one it will be terrible..Just for you. ok? LOL Wind Song- There is a fee for New Members $29.95 Plus shipping and handling. LOL"O My love |
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