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Teen Poetry #6

First Light

LoneWolf
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 384
IL

0 posted 2002-12-19 12:02 PM

¡°First Light¡±

The sun rose today
And for once
Chased away the shadows

The wintry weather
That¡¯s chilled us to the bone
Has faded since the sun has risen

The days that last forever
Have finally come to end

And as I hold you
While you
Drift off to sleep
I hope
This will never end
And I can
Hold you in my arms
Forever

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

xxxnuttyangelxxx
Member

since 2002-12-06

Posts 72
New York

1 posted 2002-12-19 07:16 PM

I enjoyed the language in the work. It seemed very calming and i liked that. Nicely done. Hope to see more of your work

much love,
shea

Lakewalker
Member Elite

since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

2 posted 2002-12-23 12:59 PM

I felt like this poem brought me into the scene, nice job writing. I liked that is was centered too.

"Be kind for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle" Plato.

CloudedDreams
Member

since 2002-11-23

Posts 210
My Fantasy Realm

3 posted 2002-12-23 01:01 PM

I agree that the words are soothing, and they carry a gentle voice. Good Job!

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