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devinechild22
Senior Member

since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

0 posted 2002-12-18 05:15 PM

You spend our last pennies
Sitting on the wodden barstool
Worn from the termites
Eating away at its flesh
Your hands hold out our last dollars
For you to get one last drink
You suck it all up
Then blow the sickening stench
Of our last pennies on our faces
A stench that will forever haunt our minds
The bitter smell of copper
Our last few pennies

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You can interprate this how ever u would like..Please let me know what you think of this piece..I really would like to hear everyone else`s opinion..And no this isn`t about me or anything so don`t bother asking..LOL
*Allison*

"O My love
Please don`t cry
I`ll wash my bloody hands
And well start a new life"
-Good Charlotte

BrokenAngel
Member

since 2002-01-06

Posts 141
Puryear, TN, USA

1 posted 2002-12-18 07:00 PM

Ummmm...I like it but then I don't really get it, reminds me of a drunk. But for some reson I just can't get into it, it's well written, just I dunno.

Read my work and read my thoughts
I'll go back into the night now
---Night Angel

dinky
Member

since 2002-10-19

Posts 258

2 posted 2002-12-19 05:23 PM

hey,
this was good
i liked it
member that one time when we got on the phone w/ ur sis's friend and i kept sayin and what? lol that was kool
almost as kool as this poem
~samantha~

"sometimes i just feel like
quittin i still might
why do i put up this fight?
why do i still write?"

xxxnuttyangelxxx
Member

since 2002-12-06

Posts 72
New York

3 posted 2002-12-19 07:04 PM

This poem seems to me to have many meanings depending on the person reading this piece. When I read it, it reminded me of my father, he is an alcoholic and reading how this character in your poem wastes his money on beer, and how you wrote about how he sat on the bar stool sounded like forever reminded me of my father. I enjoyed it very much actually. I like poems that take time to figure out and that don't have to have just one meaning. Good work

much love,
shea

devinechild22
Senior Member

since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

4 posted 2002-12-19 08:14 PM

THANKS!
*Allison*

"O My love
Please don`t cry
I`ll wash my bloody hands
And well start a new life"
-Good Charlotte

PoeticGoddessOfDepression
Member

since 2002-07-02

Posts 439
I am everywhere

5 posted 2002-12-19 10:05 PM

Reminds me of the great depression... all those darn drunks, man..
Ugh!!
That movie scares me!! That guy in the truck with the girl..
ew and she kissed Harey!! (lol, hairy, not really) and he's like... 40, and she's 15!?
I shouldn't talk though.

I liked it allison, I got into it!!!
lol
take care!

~sara

“I make an impact on lives thru truth as well as lies. I overcome ur eyes +leave and etched memory forever.
its my gift, my intentions are only well"

devinechild22
Senior Member

since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

6 posted 2002-12-19 10:41 PM

Thank you! I know man! HE is a rapist!!! FREAK! LOL Yea I am so mad at tony..O man I am gonna arghhh!!!!
*Allison*

"O My love
Please don`t cry
I`ll wash my bloody hands
And well start a new life"
-Good Charlotte

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

7 posted 2002-12-19 11:44 PM

Woah! I can smell it all the way over here! Very forceful poem, and I mean that in a good way! I liked it. "All I know is that I love you tonight." Getting alittle of track here but I like that song.

WinterWren
"I want you to believe in life. Will you find out who you are too late, to change? -Dishwalla-

foreverwithyou
Member

since 2002-10-20

Posts 204
Wonderland

8 posted 2002-12-23 10:01 PM

this reminded me of no promises in the wind yea but it was good

###CATHY###

"I am who I am who I am who am I?"

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