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Just Like All The Others
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Just Like All The Others |
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BrokenAngel Member
since 2002-01-06
Posts 141Puryear, TN, USA 
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Just Like Every One Else I don’t want you to figure me out You keep trying But I wont let you I’m to afraid to If you figure me out You unlock my dark secret You might go away Just like every one else I don’t want to love you Part of me tries to But I wont let myself I’m to afraid to If I fall in love with you I give myself to you You might go away Just like every one else I wont show my pain I wont let you see my tears I can’t I’m to afraid to If my pain shows If my tears fall You might go away Just like every one else By: Night Angel Read my work and read my thoughts I'll go back into the night now ---Night Angel [This message has been edited by BrokenAngel (12-18-2002 06:28 PM).] |
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Darkness Member
since 2002-10-17
Posts 202The place just beyond my eyes, where my spirit flies. |
Thats sad but good. I liked this peice and how it repeated the lines "I'm to afraid to" and "Just like every one else" That gave the poem a little spunk and substance not to mention structure. Keep writing, Darkness |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Hannah~ Ouch...this is such a sad write. Lots of emotion in this piece and you've expressed it well. I felt this one. Very nicely done. ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truly met the poet. ~vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (12-21-2002 05:25 AM).] |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
BrokenAngel, I thoroughly enjoyed this piece. I can relate to not wanting other people to see the real you. But if this person is at all worth it, he'll love you for all that you are. And if he can't accept it, then forget him, he's a loser anyway. Easier said than done, I know, but its the truth. Anywho, thanks for the great read. [This message has been edited by Heavens Tears (12-21-2002 12:10 PM).] |
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