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Teen Poetry #6

The World Is A Fishtank

LTEvans
Member

since 2002-12-06

Posts 72
Lenham, England

0 posted 2002-12-17 12:22 PM

The World Is A Fish Tank

The world is a fish tank,
With the verdant grass,
Sitting on pebbles and rocks.

Floating above and about,
Air sustaining and stout,
Which floats in this glasshouse.

A castle which rests by itself,
In twisted, tumbledown health,
Spires all wreathed in the light.

Glance at the stars in the dark,
Shimmering there on the lid,
Tawny and struggling points.

If you could peel back the stars,
And look out afar,
Would you see eyes looking back?

Solipsism saves us from the atavism of the Equalitarian.

LTEvans

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

1 posted 2002-12-21 05:17 AM

LTEvans~
I like this a lot.
Interesting perspective and very well penned.
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

Heavens Tears

Senior Member

since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

2 posted 2002-12-22 07:56 PM

Nicely done. Very interesting. I really didnt expect much out of a poem titled "The World is A Fishtank" but I thought it was very good. Serves me right for trying to judge a poem by its title I suppose. Nice job!

*Me*
I'm pasteing my smile back on just to please you... I always knew Elmer's glue was good for something...

OtherSideOfTheMirror
Member

since 2002-12-19

Posts 245

3 posted 2002-12-22 08:05 PM

Oh how I wish I had such creativity. Very nice job with that.

Lakewalker
Member Elite

since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

4 posted 2002-12-23 12:32 PM

Nice job of getting me to think. I enjoyed the title very much, and good job on the poem!

"Be kind for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle" Plato.

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