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Teen Poetry #6

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StellarChica
Member

since 2002-07-06

Posts 207
floating down a river...

0 posted 2002-12-16 08:12 PM

Take this,
Knife.
Scar your,
Face.
Give me,
Grounds.
For my,
Hate.
Don't say,
"Love."
You know I,
Can't.
I only,
Lust.
I'll never,
Care.

rOxXbabY391
Member

since 2002-12-14

Posts 71

1 posted 2002-12-16 09:13 PM

hey i liked your poem! short n sweet. not sure i understood it though.. lol but im kinda stupid!! hahaha
i liked the second part especially:
Don't say,
"Love."
You know I,
Can't.
I only,
Lust.
I'll never,
Care.

~*~eMiLy~*~

"I don't think I can make it through one more night. 'Cause how do you answer "What's wrong?" ~ when nothing is right.

Rainbowdust
Member

since 2002-12-05

Posts 320
Sydney, Australia

2 posted 2002-12-16 09:31 PM

Very powerful and written to perfection.

The soul would have no rainbows, had the eyes no tears.

LTEvans
Member

since 2002-12-06

Posts 72
Lenham, England

3 posted 2002-12-17 01:06 AM

Love it! Love it! Love it! Love it! Love it! Love it! Love it! Love it! Love it!

"Give me,
Grounds,
For my,
Hate."

Some people are just too pretty to be real people.

(edited by moderator) Great!

Solipsism saves us from the atavism of the Equalitarian.

LTEvans

[This message has been edited by vlraynes (12-21-2002 02:04 AM).]

devinechild22
Senior Member

since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

4 posted 2002-12-17 07:13 PM

This was really good but a little hard to read..I wasn`t to fond of the way it was formatted. It just didnt seem to flow as nicley as it could..Don`t be offended by this..Just makin a suggestion.
*Allison*

"O My love
Please don`t cry
I`ll wash my bloody hands
And well start a new life"
-Good Charlotte

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