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Teen Poetry #6

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LTEvans
Member

since 2002-12-06

Posts 72
Lenham, England

0 posted 2002-12-16 07:33 PM

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Sitting alone in the shade,
Of you.
The cast of your shadow glows,
From you.
Weighting my mind with demise,
Of you.

I drift out again all tainted, unclean,
From you.
How could you leave me without solace,
Of you.
I am polluted, stained and ruined,
From you.

The other that compels me to forget,
About you.
She is spectre from twilight and fades,
To you.
All that she is and all she can be to me is,
Not you.

devinechild22
Senior Member

since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

1 posted 2002-12-16 09:12 PM

This was really good! I hope to see more of you around. You have a unique style of writing!
*Allison*

"O My love
Please don`t cry
I`ll wash my bloody hands
And well start a new life"
-Good Charlotte

Rainbowdust
Member

since 2002-12-05

Posts 320
Sydney, Australia

2 posted 2002-12-16 09:37 PM

I have to admit there are only a few of your poems I'm able to understand, and this was one of them. I liked the simple way you conveyed this complicated situation we all too often find ourselves in...

Brilliant.

The soul would have no rainbows, had the eyes no tears.

StellarChica
Member

since 2002-07-06

Posts 207
floating down a river...

3 posted 2002-12-16 11:03 PM

Wow. You are great. This poem was great..Especially that last line. Wow. Great. Stuff. Keep it up. I usually just say that to say that but I would really be sad if you stopped writing and posting on here. So, keep it up.

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