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Enotneicna Member
since 1999-06-06
Posts 340Oakland, Or, USA 
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The Naming . Darkness opened before her A doorway to the abyss The cool silk of the blackness Encompassed her mind Reaching inward to grip Her very soul It took a moment for her to realize She wasn’t alone. . She could feel a presence There in the chasm Immense, powerful, ancient Almost overwhelming She caught her breath As a consciousness probed Her thoughts, fears, desires And her body trembled. . A question formed in her mind “Do you know what I am?” . “I believe I do, yes!” She answered. “But why am I here? What do you want of me?” . Incomprehension flooded her mind Followed by a rush of emotions That she knew to be her own. The onslaught staggered her And she stumbled. Something caught her Gently, firmly and set her aright. It felt smooth, warm, rigid. . “Are you able to stand?” The question entered her mind. . “Yes! Emotions, you don’t know!” . In her mind an image took shape. “You have a thing within your kind It is not a thing of my kind I do not require it to survive, But I covet it! And this is my puzzlement. I do not understand this desire For this thing within your kind. Teach me?” . “In the teaching of this There will be a transformation In YOU! . “You have looked into my mind. The answers you seek are there.” . “Yes, I have looked within you. For a short time. But in the merging of our minds There will be a transformation in YOU!” . "I am ready.” She answered. . “Then let our minds mingle, And the transformations begin.” . She felt herself being cradled In a large hand As a mother would cradle a child She leaned back relaxed and waited. . "I will go carefully, So as not to overwhelm you." . She felt a pressure against her consciousness As if something were trying to push her mind aside. But instead it engulfed and incorporated itself As a part of her mind. Memories........yes But they were not hers Of times and lands distant past. Soaring above the mountains Sleeping upon beds of gold And a song.......soft and soothing It whispered it’s tune to her mind She blushed at the memories of mating flights And wept at the slaughter which forced them Into the depths of the earth. So much.........so long...... Her consciousness aged centuries And her body felt the weight. . He marveled at the complexity of her mind For such an nursling race Remembering her life’s precious moments Her emotions strong and powerful He searched for the answers to his queries These emotions were bewildering things Of such magnitude and diverseness Then there it was....... Not the simple thing he had expected to find But elaborate ....refracted like light thru a prism Manifold....... Love of parents........this he expected But the aftermath of childbirth left him frazzled But he had also expected this love of offspring Friendship.....love of a friend.....puzzled him further But he devoured this emotion with relish.....each morsel . And when the merging of minds was complete And he withdrew his consciousness from hers . “I discovered an entanglement of this thing you call Love I do not understand it fully.....it is in itself a puzzlement. But I thank you for your teaching!” . “I am at a lost for all that I have learned of your kind Follies of the past........the marvels of the air....... Sigh.................I thank you also.” . “You are no longer merely a human woman, Now you belong in part to my kind Just as I in part belong now to your kind. You shall have a name fit for one of my kind But also one to reflect the changes instilled in you Because your innerself has lived thru me The vastness of my lifespan.......... I name you......Enotneicna” . . Enotneicna SLR 8-02 Words are my medicine. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Enotneicna/AncientOne~ This is just soooooooo incredibly good~ Fascinating ... and in questing you have both gained so much about the other and of the other~ And .... it is good~ I felt each stage of regression ... each slide into memory~ You would have known ... without my saying ... but I have been to the chasm and returned with more than I thought possible~ My sister .... my friend ... always joined in the tellings~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Wow, I felt this poem very easily..taking me on a journey where only one could have gone, felt and experienced all that is within... Beautiful...very beautiful... And I love the name (backwards, of course) |
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Enotneicna Member
since 1999-06-06
Posts 340Oakland, Or, USA |
Marge....Dear Sisterfriend Of course I would have known. Being joined in the tellings makes them come alive! Many blessings Always, Eno Magnus....thanks you....to be transported by the writenword is truly woundrous. Many Blkessings Always Eno Words are my medicine. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Enotneicna Your story poem is amazing in depth and so unique in vision. I'm so glad that I didn't miss reading it. Thank you! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
This is going into my library. I want to read this incredible "passage" over and over again. legnahtrae |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Eno darling heart this is an awesome read, I wasn’t in here yesterday except one small brief visit, I’m sure you understand why. If it wasn’t for Margie girl I would have missed this and that would have been a terrible shame because this is exquisite writing. I really lived within this poem you write incredibly well  Love and warm stuff as always Mushy   Breathe through the heat of our desire Thy coolness and they balm Let sense be dumb let flesh retire Speak through the earthquake wind and fire [This message has been edited by Marsha (09-12-2002 10:50 AM).] |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Eno ~~ This is incredible. I could feel all of your experience through your writing. I felt I was on the journey with you. I so look forward to reading more from you. You are a gifted spirit. Blessings of Peace....Marti Every now and then take a good look at something not made |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Eno: What an unusual and outstanding piece of work. The imagination's journey is so vast and so complex, here, and yet was easy to follow along. Wonderful work and hope you will continue to post regularly. Would love to read more. Betty Lou Hebert |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I enjoyed your journey very much and have added it to the library to be read again....and again. Very well done. If I have touched one heart through my words, then I have acheived my dream... |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Ancientone, Backwards, turn backwards...wonderful, gripping write. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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EarthenSoul Member
since 2002-05-30
Posts 163WA, USA |
Intriguing poem with the makings of a gripping novel. Incredible work of words. |
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Enotneicna Member
since 1999-06-06
Posts 340Oakland, Or, USA |
Martie...Earthangel...Marsha...Marti... Trillium...Gentle Spirit...Kethry...EarthenSoul... Such words you honor me with...incredible... awesome...exquisite...gripping...intriguing...thank you all That I was able to transport you into my writing is always my goal. To be included in some of your libraries is an honor in itself. This piece took 3 days to finish....it began just as I was drifting off to sleep....the first 3 lines came then nothing.....the next evening I wrote down to "She laid back relaxed and waited.".......and the 3rd evening finished it. I do have quite a few other pieces in the archives here at Passions....I've been posting since 1999. Many blessings to you all Always, Eno Words are my medicine. Read and live and love and heal! [This message has been edited by Enotneicna (09-12-2002 09:38 PM).] |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Eno...What a wonderful journey into the depths of your mind you have allowed us to look upon. It made me think that you were connected to another being from another time that had no knowledge of our culture & emotions and you taught him so much and became as one with him...Paul |
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Enotneicna Member
since 1999-06-06
Posts 340Oakland, Or, USA |
Paul...... Sometimes what we see when we write isn't what others see when they read what we write. The being in the encounter in my mind is a dragon.... many blessings always Eno Words are my medicine. |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Eno...Thanks for the explanation. I guess it is a fault of mine, but I always try to interpret poems by others in depth too try and get a glympse into their minds so that I can understand them better. I always believe a really good poem leaves the reader guessing as to the true meaning of it even though I can't seem to write one like that...Paul |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Enotneicna An awesome trip I am still on. Excellent. |
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Enotneicna Member
since 1999-06-06
Posts 340Oakland, Or, USA |
Paul.......Don't look at it as a fault, jit isn't a fault to want to know someone better. I have always believed that a good poem transports the reader. many blessings always Eno Symour......thank you!!! many blessings Always Eno Words are my medicine. |
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