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Promise Made
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Promise Made |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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In dreamtime days of long ago There dwelt a solemn miss Who drifted through tomorrow's dreams Found in a key of promise A promise made and promise kept That she gave with every kiss But draped o'er her soul was a veil Of aching loneliness, What had happened that the kiss Became a lovers' mess She did not know, she could not say But failed in her own test Beggared by lost chance of fate She waits for something new Not knowing what but waiting still It's all that she can do Captured by the hand of fate Each kiss is hope anew Her yearning soul tears the veils Of promise made and kept Constituting future dreams In silence she has wept The drifting of the golden hue Has closed her mind and slept In promise made and promise kept Lost chance has called its due From dreamtime days of long ago Her future rides on through Her promise made and promise kept Will colour her soul blue Until the day the circle breaks And she, herself new meaning makes Then promise made and promise kept Will call the love in dreamtime slept And each day begins anew With love's first kiss to see her through Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Very beautifully done, Keth... It sounds like the poor girl holds the key to her own shackles and doesn't even realize it.  ~ hugs from your chipmunk friendLyra |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) Oh Kethry, this is powerfully bittersweet, sweet friend, I still yearn for my first kiss so much too as I wait for Joanna to hold my hand for the first time! (sigh This is very aching yet beautiful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kethry, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is beautiful, Kethry... I enjoyed very much. *S* |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kethry~ Far too few the reads for this beauty~ 'Each kiss is hope anew' Yes ... and may it be forever so~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Kethry, This poem made me slow down and really read the heartache and strength of these words. Mike |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I feel myself being swept up in a whirlwind of emotion as I read your words. That's what poetry is all about, isn't it?--Moving others as you were moved by life's experiences. Linda |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Very beautiful Cold hands means a warm heart |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
beautiful  |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Beautiful Kethry! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Much meaning in your words today for me Lynne. This was so lovely and flowed dream like. You always write with such flair. I may not always respond, but please know I always read. hugs M |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Kethry - a most beautiful story told. Your writings suberb... BC |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Keth, I considered you always to be a very good poet...Well, let's change that.... from good to....very accomplished ...... and good!!!!!!! |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Keth beloved heart sister and holder of tomorrows promise, what you did with the phrase is exquisite. You realise of course that Krissy will be gnashing her teeth when she reads this. Gnashing them because she didn’t write anything half as good Truly darling heart when you write and I pause and wish I could write as well as you), and this is superbly written and makes me sigh deeply Truly exquisite writing, now rest and recuperate, get well soon darling heart. (Don’t do too much,) I’m not being altruistic it gives me a chance to catch up YOU know I love this utterly utterly utterly, the flow the style the content are all exquisite, bravos resounding all the way back to the gallery on this one and encore, but not till you’re better *Smile   Love and warm stuff As always Slushy  Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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