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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA 
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Sunflowers Sincerity I only wanted honesty... not long stemmed suave, over-priced, mass produced bouquet; No red roses that wilt too soon in kiss with thorns on green, and fancy ribbons of debonair dance with lies. Only sunflowers, perhaps two or three, or etchings in the sand; the common things, a three-leaf clover, your jacket, warmth, a walk in the rain, your hand and mask removed, some trifling imperfection I could fall in love with. Too much is too little, when your eyes are blank in mine when each hello has the echo of goodbye. I asked for truth, just sincerity...only sunflowers, not exaggerated promises and expensive emptiness. Some trifling imperfection I would have loved. By Melissa P. Monette |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Oooh I could just feel the pain oozing from this piece, Melissa... So very well written indeed... btw... I also love sunflowers and daisies... I carried sunflowers in my wedding bouquet, along with some autumn leaves... Thanks for sharing your wisdom with us.  ~ hugs and sunflowersLyra |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Honeybee There is nothing better than honest, simple...like the sunflower...unless it is the sweet pea. Enjoyed this! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh dang Melissa girlie...this is wondeful!! Oh I love this SO much!! You m'dear have penned a  Into my library it goes. ~Hugs~ |
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Auguste 
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
"Only sunflowers, perhaps two or three, or etchings in the sand; the common things, a three-leaf clover, your jacket, warmth, a walk in the rain, your hand and mask removed, some trifling imperfection I could fall in love with." This says it all, as far as I can see. You don't ask for much, only honest feelings. Wonderfully penned, Melissa.  *hugs*[This message has been edited by Auguste (08-24-2002 11:24 PM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Melissa, this is wonderful, oh my gosh, your talent continues to blossom, I wish for loves true trust to fill your heart! I just have to add this to my library because it is so inspiring, I LOVE IT, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Melissa, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Only sunflowers, perhaps two or three, or etchings in the sand; the common things, a three-leaf clover, your jacket, warmth, a walk in the rain, your hand and mask removed, some trifling imperfection I could fall in love with'' How I know this....you express feelings so well.....hugssssss Lauren~ The ocean looks like a thousand diamonds strewn across a blue blanket |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
 You already know how I feel about your poetry... so here is a little gift just for you... |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Honeybee - just one sunflower or two or three is not a whole lot to ask for. A very compelling poem... BC |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Does seem like the very least to ask for, and I hope you find the one that provides the reality and beauty, all in one. Sandra |
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CSKpoet Senior Member
since 2002-07-12
Posts 845Island in Paradise |
This is such a sad poem and well written ..caused me to really feel the emotions expressed..hugs to you Melissa , CherPoetry is: |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I wonder if Emily was like this. . . wonderful my friend. . . --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
To think I almost missed this, because, to tell you the truth I don't really like sunflowers much. But this poem, this poem is wonderful. A great write. I especially like the final thought. Just a trifling imperfection. Loved it! |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
No red roses that wilt too soon in kiss with thorns on green, and fancy ribbons of debonair dance with lies Honeybee - This is simply grand. I am putting it into my library!! Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Melissa- This is so sad, and yet so beautiful as well. This just reached in and grabbed my heart and had me hanging on every word. There is much truth in these words, my friend. VERY well said. Big hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truly met the poet. ~vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (08-26-2002 01:16 AM).] |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Melissa, you are such a gifted poet, but with these lines: "I asked for truth, just sincerity...only sunflowers, not exaggerated promises and expensive emptiness." you simply took my breath away. |
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