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Greeneyes

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since 2000-09-09

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In Your Poetic Mind

0 posted 2002-08-23 08:23 PM

{The dark sky  --
        city between us}

She stood   between  cradle and bed
I saw her white    gown spark a candle,
    a book,    pages
tied together with wiring
     testimony

Not once:
did I suspect the earth was hollow, lost
as I,   among       fields

or the flame
that held  shadows

{I speak of  shaded  walls}  watching

for the moon to rise,
long  --   time  --  pale  --  still
waiting sky   --

resounding    river,  wondrous --
       haunting
the moon's changing faces

I surrender  my fear
to a past I can not discard

2:00 AM
white clouds
       suspend above the city

I find myself starting to say
   {"who carried   you home?"}
angels?                          ofpeace
♫

♫

Etched glass of  spirit, stone
      clues  --  divine presence --
every shadow sits  silent  in seduction
      lavender evenings   dance somewhere

blue fills  windows
green calms  fears

      she was tender  loving

I define her vesper whispers
in silent moments
bringing rain to  gardens

she,  beautiful, lovely-- gentle

my heart
     no longer lost

The ocean looks like a thousand diamonds strewn across a blue blanket
I lean against the wind pretend I am weightless and in this moment I am happy

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (08-23-2002 11:55 PM).]

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2002-08-23 08:30 PM

One of my goals? To hear you
read your poetry...

ctowen
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since 2001-10-18

Posts 2286
Green Mountains of VT

2 posted 2002-08-23 08:34 PM

Hmmmm ....
   I found a strange calmness as I read this.
   Perhaps it was the candle burning bright
   in my new window. Maybe its the sound of
   peaceful rain feeding the flowers outside
   it. Maybe because I have been carried
   home.

   Either way ... loved how you still put it
   all together.

catalinamoon

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since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

3 posted 2002-08-23 08:56 PM

Very very nice, it just gave me a good feeling.
Sandra

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2002-08-23 09:20 PM

"Etched glass of  spirit, stone
      clues  --  divine presence --
every shadow sits  silent  in seduction
  lavender evenings   dance somewhere"
---------------------------------------------
Lauren~You are remarkable..
This write brought me to tears...
not sure of the reason for the tears..
but it was good   believe me.
~Hugs sweet poetess~

rosepetals25

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since 2000-05-31

Posts 3076
PA

5 posted 2002-08-23 10:17 PM

Sheesh I wish I could write like this.

Tara

ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

6 posted 2002-08-23 10:27 PM

Stellar write. ThisDiamond.

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

7 posted 2002-08-23 10:39 PM

The candlelight flickered, the words held steady. Lauren, you have such a soft magical way with imagery, I always come away wanting to read more.

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

8 posted 2002-08-23 10:45 PM

"I define her vesper whispers
in silent moments
bringing rain to  gardens

she,  beautiful, lovely-- gentle

my heart
   no longer lost"

(big hugggssssss) Oh Lauren, this made me cry because it is soooooo beautiful, I love it! You define such gentle beauty with your golden heart, sweet friend, God Bless You, I LOVE IT, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Madame Chipmunk
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since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

9 posted 2002-08-23 10:49 PM

I define her vesper whispers
in silent moments
bringing rain to gardens

A gorgeous write, Lauren... It feels soft.

~ soft hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

10 posted 2002-08-24 12:05 PM

Lauren

Words, before you, were just words...within your frame, they become tender.

SimplyGold
Senior Member

since 2002-07-10

Posts 1453

11 posted 2002-08-24 12:49 PM

This is very beautiful. I enjoyed not only the read but the phasing. Yes, I too, would love to hear you read it. So creative and hauntingly tender.

Auguste

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since 2000-02-16

Posts 3953
By the sea

12 posted 2002-08-24 01:53 AM

Writers could learn by reading your work, Lauren, as I've learned and am still learning. Wonderful, my friend. *hugs*

The stars will shine when I am gone,
the earth will turn on as before,
the gulls, still race along the shore,
the morning star, still kiss the dawn

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

13 posted 2002-08-24 10:22 AM

Greeneyes - you're amazing....

BC

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

14 posted 2002-08-24 11:16 AM

L~ sometimes when I read your words,
I no longer feel lost.
I feel as though there is someone out there
who knows and understands things in the way that I do. I feel like.....there is hope.....

everytime that I read you Lauren,
I am blessed and thankful that the good Lord
let us become the friends that we are today, for when he sent me you, indeed....
an angel......

sweet lil

If I have touched one heart through my words, then I have acheived my dream...

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

15 posted 2002-08-24 11:37 AM

Lauren, if I ever fall asleep reading your
poetry, it won't be from boredom....but
quite simply 'cause it was a lullaby....

Love the new pic too...very nice...I can
see you dreaming and composing in that pose..

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

16 posted 2002-08-25 10:25 PM

I know just what kind of a candle to use Lauren. . .

and what kind of a flame I'd like to see there. . .

beautiful. . . just. . .beautiful. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

WhiteRose
Member Elite

since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

17 posted 2002-08-25 10:28 PM

What lovely poetry this is. Almost dreamy in it's read. Magical. Enjoyed it very much.

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

18 posted 2002-08-26 01:46 AM

Lauren-
I'm with Sunshine. I would LOVE to hear
you read your poetry. it is truly lovely.
I have never read more tenderly penned
words than those from your pen.
Absolutely gorgeous.
Hugs,
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

tracie66
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since 2000-01-18

Posts 4713
Australia

19 posted 2002-08-26 06:04 AM

Oh WOW!!
This is fantastic, I'm left feeling so good after reading this beautiful poem, well penned.

~hugs~
Tracie~

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe

JAR
Junior Member

since 2001-11-06

Posts 34

20 posted 2002-08-26 04:29 PM

LittleL'

the years ahead
look good
learning and growing
and letting go
luv you'
J'

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