Open Poetry #22 |
mostly blue with dots of red |
Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
I spoke too soon I gave too soon, that’s what they all said, but even an hour later I had the same opinion and even now after almost 2 years I stand by my words and my love for you remains just the same NO, that’s not true! now that I don’t see you anymore it has actually grown ten-fold and a few times more not sure how much, for love is immeasurable, unfathomable in depth infinite in numbers I mark each day as happy and sad with red and blue happy it is when I see you though from far away walking in easy steps face lit with a smile and that smile travels right to my face even from the distance that you have managed to create between the rivers of us sad is when your shadow walks away in hurried steps changing the smile into a grim nod of acceptance of your leave unfortunately my calendar shows an increasing majority of blue and my days are spent alone and painting in dark shades of blue with the occasional dots of red when I see wonderful sunsets and when the breeze blows memories of you |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
aw this is so sad! Very well written and the imagery is wonderful. May you be able to paint mostly red with dots of blue soon! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sudhir, Sad but very well written. Enjoyed the read. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sudhir~ An absolutely beautiful and longing write~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent write Sudhir! You are quickly becoming one of my favourite writers here at Passions. Well done. ~Hugs~ ~ Time has cast a spell on you |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sudhir Love is like that sometimes...at least you have a colorful calander. I like the way you wrote your feelings in this sad piece. My best to you! |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
You've captured the essence of longing and loss, hugs to you my friend, I understand and appreciate your words. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
happy it is when I see you "though from far away walking in easy steps face lit with a smile and that smile travels right to my face even from the distance that you have managed to create between the rivers of us" That is so powerful, and so sad, yet so incredibly beautiful! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"and my days are spent alone and painting in dark shades of blue with the occasional dots of red when I see wonderful sunsets and when the breeze blows memories of you" (big hugggsssssss) Oh Sudhir, this is so very powerfully bittersweet, sweet friend, I know how you feel as I miss my Joanna so much yet my love for her only grows stronger having hope and faith in her! (sigh) This is powerful, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sudhir, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
This is so sad, Sudhir...but you write with such beauty and earnestness. Your feelings just jump out from the words. I hope that you soon see more of the red. ~ hugs and best wishes to you Lyra |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Sudhir- Yes, this is sad, but it's also gorgeous. Absolutely beautiful writing, my friend. Your words grabbed me and wouldn't let go. EXCELLENT write! Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
there's a lot that could be said about this that the heart would understand. . . a work from your heart my friend. . . ---------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
O my dear friends... thank you all so very much from the depth of my heart... Regards to all of you, Sudhir |
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A. L. Becker Member
since 2002-09-06
Posts 167San Francisco, California |
my goodness, Sudhir, but you can write. i have been known to mark a calendar or two in my life. does it help? or just keep me hanging on? thank you for the beauty of your words. Annie :- |
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rebekah33 Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 140MD/NJ |
Indeed "love is immeasurable". I hope one day that your life is filled with red dots and sunsets -R. "So stop and love and dance and live and laugh until you cry" Edwin McCain |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
annie and rebekkah... thank you both, very much... for your time, and your words... regards, sudhir |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
had to bump it again, this is a great work! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
A thankful for the bump... regards, sudhir |
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