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Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

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Gaia

0 posted 2002-08-23 03:33 AM

She sits in her chair
with her back to the sun,
the days are too short,
her life's nearly done.
Reflecting, remembering
her dreams of the past,
their romance was great,
it just didn't last.
She rocks back and forth,
folded hands in her lap,
knowing her springtime
will yield no more sap.
But sad she is not
for she truly does feel
her blessing was knowing
his love had been real.
So in saying goodbye
she did not need to cry.
She remembered his kiss,
and romantic bliss.
Now she sits in her chair
in the chill night air,
and closes her eyes
under dark midnight skies,
wrapped in memories deep,
sleeps her final sleep.

[This message has been edited by Midnitesun (08-23-2002 03:35 AM).]

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

1 posted 2002-08-23 06:47 AM

dang Kacy, this one gave me a chill, but so beautiful are the words. It is good to read your words again and have you back among us.
Hugs.

somebody tell me, please help me....
understand.......(as sung by Trace Adkins)

{on the wings of words are spirits fly...and our souls are free~me

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2002-08-23 06:49 AM

Now where did this come from...
some place far back in long ago...
it is so good to have you home, Kacy...

Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

3 posted 2002-08-23 06:54 AM

I enjoyed this,
With the minor exception of the line,
will yield no more sap.
not that I could come up with a better one,
just sort of made me cringe a touch.
It might be that there is no other references to associate it with
In the poem.
Other than this it’s a nice flowing,
If slightly morose a subject (which I like),
Poem

Gloom

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

4 posted 2002-08-23 06:59 PM

MidniteSun~
A sad ... yet very satisfying feel to this write~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

5 posted 2002-08-23 07:22 PM

Great imagery here Kacy...
and the rhythm was like that of a rocking chair..
could just picture her there
rocking the seemingly endless days away...
Good write!
~Hugs~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
So you won't ever forget me ~

Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

6 posted 2002-08-23 07:46 PM

Very touching piece of work. Enjoyed. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

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California

7 posted 2002-08-23 08:19 PM

Midnite

I have seen her with your words, you colored her so well. Enjoyed!

ctowen
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since 2001-10-18

Posts 2286
Green Mountains of VT

8 posted 2002-08-23 08:41 PM

I tend to believe that "knowing" such love exists is sometimes better than "falling" into the possibilities ....

It's nice to see your shining self again!

catalinamoon

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since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

9 posted 2002-08-23 08:52 PM

Hi, how is life in Colorado? I like all parts of this poem, it makes me think of my Grandmother, after my Grandpa died. Though I know that wasn't the message, that's just what it brought to mind. Lovely writing. Good to see you again.
Sandra

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

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Gaia

10 posted 2002-08-23 10:15 PM

Thank you all for your comments on this poem, which just flooded my brain after observing an elderly lady rocking away silently, staring into space as if some secret was hidden in the clouds.

rosepetals25

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PA

11 posted 2002-08-23 10:19 PM

I LOVE this... I really do.

Tara

Mistletoe Angel

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Portland, Oregon

12 posted 2002-08-23 11:12 PM

(big hugggsssssss) Oh Kacy, this is so sadly beautiful, sweet friend, I love my Joanna so much and I always feel the ghost of her true love when I dream as I yearn to have her for the first time! (sigh) This is very heartfelt, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kacy, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Madame Chipmunk
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since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

13 posted 2002-08-23 11:26 PM

This touched me deeply, Kacy...
in ways which are too complicated to explain... sheesh!!!! I just realized that tears are running down my face...
Thanks for sharing.

~ hugs from deep in my heart

Lyra

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"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

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