Open Poetry #22 |
Death and Robert |
Martie
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Death and Robert We could all see your joke like a formality we gathered in the reflection you made in the tears of recall even as you insisted on a laugh Turn over the line is too straight where you slipped like a gumbee you can twist back somehow with your charm intact down by the river wearing mukluks and calling the dog You left while my back was turned and now when I say goodbye my voice my voice catches like silly string on your grin as I remember your vim and call stop to somehow keep you in but the trace was only a family resemblance chained and shackled stumbling out the door and you are free but also never more |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, You always suprise me with a Martie twist. Enjoyed. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
I think I understand.... If only, if only, if only I could One wish for you, I'd give...I would.. But time does take and dash to dreams those moments once, in flow of streams. If only, if only, if only I could... |
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Martie
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Sy--The twist was made, but not by me...thank you kind sir Barry--A friend died...so full of life and fun, his death almost seems a joke he played..but no, he is dead, or free. His brother, who looks so much like him was allowed to come to the service from jail...he was chained and two armed guards took him out the door. He is alive, but certainly not free. I was expressing my feelings after the funeral service where everyone laughed and cried. Thank you for being you! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
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You left while my back was turned and now when I say goodbye my voice my voice catches like silly string on your grin as I remember your vim and call stop =================================== We are never ready to say goodbye..no matter how much time we have. heart-hugs Martie-girl In the space between now and then |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I am so sorry....at both sets of circumstances... and for your loss, which you will carry, because you are Martie... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
I am so sad at the loss of your friend.. What an amazing write.. What an amazing woman you are. I am humbled at the way you are able to express yourself this way. ~Hugs sweet poetess~ ~ Time has cast a spell on you |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggssssss) Oh Martie, this is soooooo sad, I am so sorry for the loss of your friend, I know he will always love you so much and be blessed to have had you in his heart as you are a sensitive, compassion person with a golden heart! (sad sigh) My thoughts go out to you, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
"you are free but also never more" You say so much with this one line, Martie... I am so sorry about your friend's death... and oh the bittersweet irony of his brother being still here but not free... Thanks for sharing this with us. ~ loving hugs Lyra |
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Balladeer
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I thought the poem was excellent without the explanation but now, knowing the story behind it, it is phenominal....great work, Martie. |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Martie, you know how very sorry I am. To lose a friend is often sometimes worse than losing a family member. My most heartfelt condolences to both you and Taylor. My prayers are with you, dear ones. *hugs* |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
What an image!!! I bet your friend is grinning with love after reading this beautiful tribute. You're an amazing person Martie.... love and hugs Maree [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (08-23-2002 05:45 PM).] |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MartieSis~ You are so tender ... so touching ... so real~ This is such a remarkable write, dearest lady~ I sure do agree with Balladeer ... (now see what you did ?) *Hugs* Coast to Coast, sweetie~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Sounds like a loss. An individual who knew how to please others while living with his own pain. A lesson to all. A footnote; it is said that federal prisoners are handcuffed to and in the grave. Enjoyed "Happy people have no history" - French Proverb |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Martie, what an interesting and heartfelt true tale you have told. Enjoyed. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Martie
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Janet--I know how well you know this..heart hugs back at ya. Karilea--You are sweet reply to me, especially the last part. Hugs! Nancy--It is just the way I feel needing to be expressed. It is easier for me to write poetry than talk. Thanks so much and hugs back. Thank you, Noah, for being so kind. Lyra--Bittersweet, yes...thank you for understanding and for the love hug. Balladeer--It always pleases me to hear from you...even if you make me blush. Thank you. Michael--You are a good friend...I appreciate you...thanks. Maree--Hi! So good to see you! Thank you for always being so possitive about my poetry. Hugs! Marge/sis--To get you and the deer to agree..is very special to me. Thanks! Richard--Thank you so much for reading and for the interesting information...how sad that is, if true, even in death, no freedom...at least not for the body. Chris--Yes, heart felt..and thank you for leaving such a nice reply. |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - you invite us in to react with you to the life and death struggle we all go through when someone we love moves to the spirit world and leaves the life we are used to seeing them in. A touching view of a life you cared for - great poetry - Paul |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
An excellent piece, I'll have to second Balladeer on this on. Sorry for your loss |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Martie, goodbye is not something I ever can do, and carry losses with me forever. I feel this pain in my very soul and send you as much comfort as one can to a friend with words, may his spirit soar to new heights. I wish his brother well too, as sometimes just being given a second chance is all he will need, and as for you, I wish you love and comfort at this time of loss. And, yes I agree with Michael too, your poem hit its mark Martie. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Martie, He may have gone away, but why is there music in my ear?. I'll listen again for it same time next life. Oh how I wish a great big hug for you right now and fond memories along with your sadness. This is so beautifully written Lots and lots of hugs Liz |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Phenomenal music you have penned from a phenomenal heart. Write on Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
I wonder if goodbyes are never meant to be said You are a poetess without equal, Martie. jeff |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
This is so sad Cold hands means a warm heart |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Such tenderness in the face of such a sad turn. Prayers to you and your friends. An artisan with the content of such disturbing events Martie. Take Care. ThisDiamond |
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