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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
By the time You get home from work today, I’ll be packed and far away. The note read. By the time, You find this note for you They’ll be nothing you can do. The note said. By the time, You realize I am gone, You won’t know why this was done, Probably not miss me here Till after several beers. I know you won’t even cry You’ll continue to get by, Joking on it at the bar. I even left you the car, Furniture and other things, All except my pearl earrings, And the clothes I left wearing, Of our life I kept nothing. By the time You wake to another day, That life will be far away, You’ll be happy with your beer That washed away my man dear And left me a drunken lout That would abuse me and shout; I just could not live that way, Instead of love you gave fear, I left it all to be out. No next time. Gloom |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Wow, This struck home for a lot of reasons. A very powerful write about a sad subject. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Been there done this one Professor...only mine wasn't a drunk which made the abuse even worse, you see, he knew what he was doing...I didn't write the letter, I just walked out the door! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Professor Gloom Good powerful write and you write well. |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
this is very well done.... very real Like this write very much |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
 They weren't pearl earrings they were little gold balls actually. Boy, this will hit a nerve today, could be a lot of women's story, sure was mine! I kept this one to remind me - never again! Great job sir.The most valuable thing you own is a smile, wear it, and share it. |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, White Rose, Very sad subject, the worse part is that this is true, Too true, but ancient history. The Lady of this poem has moved on and found happiness. Pleased you liked it. Thank you, hoot_owl_rn, Then that gives him less excuse and proves his greater stupidly, The letter would have been lost on him also. Glad you enjoyed. Thank you, Seymour Tabin, You honor me with your praise. Thank you, Zinsser, I am pleased you liked it. Thank you, Mysteria, Her earring were actually diamond studs from her Grandmother, I changed that to fit the poem better, gold would have worked also, But that phrase “pearls before swine” sort of leaped to mind. I hope you never have again, pleased you enjoyed. Gloom |
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