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Toes in the Water
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Toes in the Water |
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Blue Kitty Member
since 2002-08-05
Posts 72Virginia |
I love the feel of sand Just where the ocean meets the land, And shifts the gritty feeling Under you as you stand With a salty nose your senses reeling, Roaring surf makes a noisy silence, As gulls go sandwich stealing, And children do the hot sand dance, As I stand in foam ankle deep And the sand between my toes seep I watch the dolphins in the ocean play Coming close then they drift away. I dip my toes in the water when I can I’d stay on the beach all the day In the mixing zone of surf and sand. P. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
This "Toe's" usually in hot water....liked the write... |
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Blue Kitty Member
since 2002-08-05
Posts 72Virginia |
Then you need a better place to dip them, nothing nicer than the salty breeze in your hair and the surf playing on your toes. You do have hair don’t you? P. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
I have alot on my Toes?....Does that count?....Yea, I've still got hair, mine turned gray, not loose sweetie.... |
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Blue Kitty Member
since 2002-08-05
Posts 72Virginia |
Hairy Toes, are they big too? gray is alright, my daddy is getting gray so I don’t complain about the color. Nice people have gray hair, but nice people can have no hair too. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
there is nothing like dipping your toes in the ocean.......thank you for a wonderful memory. Hugs. somebody tell me, please help me.... |
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Blue Kitty Member
since 2002-08-05
Posts 72Virginia |
Oh, there’s nothing like it, I’m lucky to live close enough to walk to the beach, I spend all my extra time down there, which is never enough. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
I love the feel of sand Just where the ocean meets the land, And shifts the gritty feeling Under you as you stand With a salty nose your senses reeling, Roaring surf makes a noisy silence, As gulls go sandwich stealing, And children do the hot sand dance, As I stand in foam ankle deep And the sand between my toes seep I watch the dolphins in the ocean play Coming close then they drift away. I dip my toes in the water when I can I’d stay on the beach all the day In the mixing zone of surf and sand. Me, too, me, too!!!!! This was so much fun. I'm sitting here barefoot at the computer and I love everything about the trip to the beach you've included so masterfully here. The only nit I would pick is the line: And the sand between my toes seep I would say "sands" so your subj/predicate would agree and you could still keep your exact rhyme. Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
This is nicely done... I like toeing the line too  Regards,Sudhir |
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Blue Kitty Member
since 2002-08-05
Posts 72Virginia |
I’m terrible with those sort of things, I guess you are right, but I’m just happy to get all the words spelled ok. I did get them spelt write didn’t eye, I used a spell checker on it. I like to toe in a line in the sand every chance I get. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I love the feeling where you walk right on the edge of the surf -- the way the sand is sort of smooth and joined like glass, but easy to break through -- to sink into. If that makes sense. |
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