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serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

0 posted 2002-08-21 02:18 AM

I smell swamp in summer steam--
in August, even moss will sweat.
I watch the sun set without breeze--
I color clouds in storms not yet.

Lamp-light reds across the skies
in shades of aqua, turning puce.
Yellow beams that part my thighs--
creating sighs that call for truce.

I smell pirates--
I feel sea.
The solid land
is fathomed deep...

I close my eye-
lids kissed by free

I AM
the missing part of me...

Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

1 posted 2002-08-21 02:22 AM

Ok, I was gonna say something about Jimmy Buffet (smelling pirates...how cool is that?) but this is really too damn good to be flippant about. Damn, K...how do you do that? Shakin' my head.....

brian sites
Senior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

2 posted 2002-08-21 03:44 AM

I love it when you walk
us through your mind
and we get to see
the reddened moss
of sunset ecstacy

brian

I never aimed at reality; I aimed at truth. --Orson Welles

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

3 posted 2002-08-21 06:05 AM

very well done Karen, and I like the way Brian called it sunset ecstasy. It is a pleasure to see things through your mind.

somebody tell me, please help me....
understand.......(as sung by Trace Adkins)

{on the wings of words are spirits fly...and our souls are free~me

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

4 posted 2002-08-21 10:15 AM

I smell swamp in summer steam--
in August, even moss will sweat.
I watch the sun set without breeze--
I color clouds in storms not yet.

Lamp-light reds across the skies
in shades of aqua, turning puce.
Yellow beams that part my thighs--
creating sighs that call for truce.
=============================

I AM
the missing part of me...
============================

yeah...what Duncan said...
*shaking me head too* ...
then *skipping out of room singing* "wonder"

If all the tear drops went to heaven
And if all the pain was confined ...
Would I be your salvation
could I make your spirit shine.

KWSB

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

5 posted 2002-08-21 10:21 AM

Y'know...I've been playing with the idea
of delving back into the dirt and pulling
out some N'awlins memories...

this about sparks the thought that I should
no longer think about it...

and justdoit

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

6 posted 2002-08-21 10:26 AM

I AM
the missing part of me
====================
perenially
foreverly missing
the leftovers
that could have been me
the cut outs and the waste
the jagged and the sharp
in pieces
I exist

in the missing part of me
I AM
====================

sorry I let myself go

Thanks for your poetry...
Regards O Serene One,
Sudhir

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

7 posted 2002-08-21 01:36 PM

The fact that you wrote this (and for some reason, I'm stuck on the yellow beams image *ahem*) is cool enough. The fact that it is going to inspire Sunshine to write about N'Awlins now .... damn!

Thanks for the double-gift, Sen!

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

8 posted 2002-08-21 11:48 PM

Dang! This is powerful...you always take your writing to new levels of raw.

Take care,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

9 posted 2002-08-21 11:54 PM

Raw sensuality, Karen.....
mmmm.....those yellow beams of light!
Excellent write, Mrs. Newlywed.

~ hugs hugs and some more hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

10 posted 2002-08-22 08:47 AM

popping in to curtsy and say a humble thank you--and? I will be back to read, when the weather clears here...stormy weather, reminding us all here in New Orleans, that this IS swamp...sigh

jellybeans
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since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

11 posted 2002-08-22 10:04 AM

excellent excellent.......wow......great write lady......applause...followed by sighs...I had almost forgotten about or is that gave up on 'finding me'...maybe...just maybe...I am not lost either...maybe I too...am the missing part of me........
excellent write

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

12 posted 2002-08-28 02:12 AM

serenity-
This is EXCELLENT! I love it!
You are writing some incredible stuff lately.
Not that you didn't ALWAYS write incredible
stuff...but it's EXTRA incredible lately!
Loving this, in a big way.
Hugs,
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

CocoBaci
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 3043

13 posted 2002-09-24 10:20 AM

"I watch the sun set without breeze--
I color clouds in storms not yet"

Serenity, it's so sweet to have come across this gem...
Thank you PoetFriend for this enjoyed read...
*~coco~*

Krishankins

Senior Member

since 2002-06-23

Posts 972
Texas

14 posted 2002-09-24 10:37 AM

The others have pretty much hit the nail on the head. I just wanted to say that I agree with them. BEAUTIFUL!!!!!

Hey dog, did you see the size of that chicken!?

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