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wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

0 posted 2002-10-11 12:00 PM

Reds’ was crowded

Half full of regulars
washin’ down the days’ dust

Half full with the Dove hunters
that descended every “Opening Day”

and paid the ranchers
exorbitant “trespass fees”
to hunt on their spreads

This year, like most years
the extra money was welcomed
The source?.........Not so much

Iambe stood beside me
with her back to the bar
moving in time with the juke
in that way she has, that says
“I want to dance”

Red and I were debating
the pros and cons
of our “temporary guests”
when….

“THERE!”

I glanced up into the mirror
behind the bar, behind Red
to see a drunken
foolish young man,
pointing at Iambe

“YES, THE LEGGY WENCH!”

a young man that had obviously
never tasted sawdust
flavored with whiskey and beer

“BATHE HER,
AND BRING HER TO ME!”

Or had never learned
the lesson from it

I stirred to rise
but was settled
with a gentle touch
on my shoulder

And watched as she
strode
with purpose
toward her “trespasser”

Red leaned in close
to my ear and said

“Yanno?’

“I hope that boy
ain’t a bleeder”

~wranx

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

1 posted 2002-10-11 12:02 PM

Whoa awesome poem.

Cold hands means a warm heart

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

2 posted 2002-10-11 12:06 PM

*smiling here*...
those closing lines are dead on...
Iambe has lit a fire in quite a few of our muses now...Capt should be proud...
You carry her on well poet sir.
jm

In the space between now and then
I lost the fire, lost a friend
and Ill never be the same again
Still, I believe in the innocence
we gave away.

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

3 posted 2002-10-11 07:59 AM

(chuckling) Pure Iambe.... captured well..

I am enjoying these.... a great deal!!!

Good stuff Ed, and if she doesn't stay with you for a while at least.... she's a bigger fool than I thought.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2002-10-11 09:32 AM

Doubling the Captain's chuckling...Wranx, you are doing Iambe mighty fine...you've caught her gist, AND her left hook.

WhiteRose
Member Elite

since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

5 posted 2002-10-11 09:48 AM

When dove season started here in the south, we were bombarded with men in camouflage. From the very old, to the very young. I didn't know it was dove season until I asked a man with three boys, the youngest about 4 (yes in camouflage too) what season this was. When he said dove, I almost fainted. My goodness. Such a tiny little bird really, hardly a mouth full. Oh well.

brian sites
Senior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

6 posted 2002-10-11 10:31 AM

YEAH!
C'MON OVAH HEAH, GIRL!
damn she look fine, don'tshe?
      (uh...billybob she looks mad)
no she don't
C'MERE BABY!
now
whyn't you just sit here on myTHWACK!
AUAUUUHGHGHGH!
       (uh...I tole you, billybob,.. huh?
                                no ma'am)

love it, ED

[This message has been edited by brian sites (10-11-2002 10:32 AM).]

LngJhnAg
Member Elite

since 1999-07-23

Posts 3508
Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion

7 posted 2002-10-11 10:35 AM

Great story, wranx. I wonder if Toerag has recovered yet. I like the way you kept the lines short, with great punch in each. I can almost see Iambe standing there.

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

8 posted 2002-10-18 03:23 PM

You're really coming into your own
with the borrowings of another --
only, not borrowings.
Yours?

Dude.

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