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listening to the voices in my head |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA 
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this is a challenge answer from a long while ago. . . the challenge was to write in the style of James Joyce's Finnegans' Wake. . . here's my take on it. . . hope that you like it. . . ----------------------------------------------------------------------- convoluted, disparaging images convey an antiseptic feeling among the twain convulsing among the waters waving oceanic still beyond atolls of cloistered frames of coconuts distinct instances find that individuality remarks to itself in a microtonal language of procession and thought serially formalizing symbiotically chaotic between two trains (leaving at the same time) aleatory bends the will of chance in a circular prism of dimension tossing coins into the Treviatic fountain near the antarchaic plazmafair wondering when language became so uselessful and when the dayietys days of tea became a tottenklangfe of totes and klangs fisting the boundaries have been broken toward a tritonic unity of wrought wonder harmonized in the hebrionic future when the skyes open the moons (and we finally understand what all those circles mean) the O groing O ---- O be --- O will O a roundagin antitime will ante time and time will collate its hands into a seamless mediocrity that spins panningly swirling multicolored beyond the dawn of blank (the convex light of notion) [the concave disparity of simplicity] the Buckyball at the end of the subliminal cosmic string tessaracting between this dimension and the other will b e o u c with no air n soaring past the time of spectral philosophy and into the time of dissertive learning this is introspection a look behind the quasimabic door into a whole new inflectitrhythm that uses sound instead of syllable via an espressivo Esperanto that need not be spoken by tongue or heard by ear (or even written down by pen) a thoughtage that you need process but never learn this convolution begins closely guarded, they want to become to enter to flow back through the ebb (the ylem) until again the spirit is ------------------------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. [This message has been edited by Sven (10-09-2002 10:19 PM).] |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Sven - I'm not familiar with the style you mentioned, but I know this is the way it should be. You my friend, are an excellent poet... BC |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Very interesting. But I like it. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Style of Finnegan's Wake, eh? Well you obviously did an excellent job, as I have no clue what you were talking about.  Wonderful work! Great to see you in here again, Sven m'man. I'll keep an eye on you. Allan |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  Wow!!! That sure is a "challenge", I do know of James Joyce's "Ulysses" well but I must admit too I have never heard of Finnegan's Tales! Though I am not familiar with the style, I do enjoy this so very much, sweet friend, yay, I LOVE IT, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sven, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Moonlight Romeo
since 2001-09-10
Posts 982The heart of you |
Perhaps, some comparison might be in order. Page 3 of Finnegan's Wake Thank you. What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun. |
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Alicia Member
since 2002-03-22
Posts 279 |
~Taking my time with this,...yea,...slow reading it again. There is just so much. Glad to see you around. *Peace Sven. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Savoring each word like a fine morsel. So glad to see you again friend. *s* If I have touched one heart through my words, then I have acheived my dream... |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Umm...I have only one thing to say here. THANKS FOR THE HEADACHE JOHN!   I may need a few more times with this one...heck I may need it read out loud by someone too!  Meanwhile..while Jennifer wanders around after an apparent bump on her head from John's poetry...  well...doesn't hurt to make me think, eh? (ps...no wise cracks, Mister!)Giving this a bump.. "two hearts will build the foundation for one point of light |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
COULD YOU POST THIS AGAIN IN OPEN 23? Please? **begs**  "two hearts will build the foundation for one point of light |
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rascalx Senior Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 590Florence, SC, USA |
John, I am not familiar with the Finnegan style you refer to, but I love this. The language weaves in and out and around like a dance..but it's a coordinated dance with its own distinct flow... funny, as I read this, I wonder if this came to you easily or if it was difficult to find the words to match the "music" (ie. style) you were forming in your head? Does that make sense? lol - Jeff |
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