Open Poetry #22 |
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Wise Men and Silence |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration ![]() |
Wise Men and Silence ©2002 C.G. Ward it's an affliction, this thing, a temporary plague glooming its way through my sleep like the ten-minute intermission at an symphonic opening of solitude. the cat sang and I curled my toes, searching for a way to quiet the busted dam of her insinuations so I could feed her ego with mute confirmation. it didn't work. I lay here whispering her name - running a finger through the hole representing her loss, playing with words that say the past is passed and I can no more change that than I can halt the sun's rising over the waves of the Pyrian sea; what am I, a moon to light the night with spoonfuls of sorrow? no. I am man, sorrow is dark, and dreams are nothing in the face of silence. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
My Indepth Commentary: Silence sucks compared to dreams vacuum visions volatile slow drifting grains of sandstorm won't tick tock within the glass one tide pulls dusty wind that knows tide cajoling in cry inside we find the bottom weight. |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Awesome write Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Greeneyes![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
A plague is never temporary'' to say let go, sounds so easy huh? I kknow, I know....... HUgsssss you, muses finding their way to interupt life, sometimes good, some not, some memories of a past....(I know this too) if I am reading this correctly Wise MEN are NEVER SILENT!!! you never fail to show "life" I admire that....so.....be well ---hugssss you... ![]() Lauren~ I need some distraction |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
I lay here whispering her name - running a finger through the hole representing her loss, playing with words that say the past is passed and I can no more change that than I can halt the sun's rising over the waves of the Pyrian sea; what am I, a moon to light the night with spoonfuls of sorrow? no. I am man, sorrow is dark, and dreams are nothing in the face of silence. You've topped yourself with this one, C. I am sitting right beside ya, in the darkness, the absence and the silence. Telling myself, I don't miss the dream at all. Knowing what a liar I can be. |
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SEA![]() ![]()
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"no. I am man, sorrow is dark, and dreams are nothing in the face of silence." Kissy face, you do inspire me...... here.... In the darkness of your sorrow I pretend I can't hear all the things you won't say I watch your lips move in soundless whispers and try to catch them as they fall then I remember, there is no spoon only dreams held in sleepless trance while wishing for the moon ![]() |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
KAREN - there are some dreams, love, that suck in comparison to silence. Like not only the intention of the poem, but the presentation as well. Thanks lady. Loner - I know, isn't it? Lauren - Not true, not true. I got rid of my ex-wife, didn't i? ![]() ![]() D-Man - LOL - your words ring so true. Know what i did? Lie to myself until i started to believe it... of course, you still have to deal with the dreams. sigh. *smile* You know, you should write me some time. Thanks m'man. Susanofer - I notice that you TRIED to keep from rhyming! ![]() ![]() |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
Amazing, the end is killer!!! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
What a paradox! If I respond I blow my cover! ![]() |
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Cpat Hair![]()
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
like this...and in the ending words you tie it all together nicely... good work! |
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Samantha G Kennedy Member
since 2002-07-27
Posts 131Kent England |
"I lay here whispering her name - running a finger through the hole representing her loss" its in those quiet times, we feel it. I thought your write an excellent description of loss, and those solitary moments of weakness when we miss someone. this totally penetrates the reader, great stuff Sammie |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Christopher Well done, you write very well. Enjoyed |
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garysgirl![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Christopher, I love to read your poems. You describe your feelings so well. Thanks for sharing them with us. With Love and Best Wishes To All, Ethel |
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Moonlight Romeo![]() ![]()
since 2001-09-10
Posts 982The heart of you |
A wise man listens to the silence, and accepts its words. This is truly an excellent example of what melancholy can do to a poet. Thank you. What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun. |
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Krishankins![]()
since 2002-06-23
Posts 972Texas |
It can be so loud sometimes. Nice piece of lonely, C. |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Hello Golden Voice, you know I love this. Highlight the entire poem and you'll have my favorite part! ![]() ~Tier ![]() "I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..." |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Loss of Love, an invitation to insomnia. Enjoyed. |
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SEA![]() ![]()
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
dang it.... I really meant to not rhyme too....must have been subconscious ![]() ![]() |
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