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In the dog house.
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In the dog house. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland 
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---- black dog Slumped shoulders submit to this ruse highway, with limps flaying through the wicked wind, I empty my bowels of love-lore lost. Inert, my ravaged habit consoles. Spectral shadow's bathe the mane of an ebony canine, gaily gnawing an abused bone. Suspiciously he stalks stifled skin, this congealed shroud of me. Blooded birth bares my petty nerve, it's servitude vows broken by celibate ceremony, the dog's tongue loosens love-lines, drawing us to a pacific epilogue. =========================== Well I am in the dog house at the moment with my muse and some other people, and rather than write down my woe, I decided to repost an oldie, that sums up my woe. Off I go to wallow in my pit of woe in the dog house. :, El riesgo vive siempre! |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
don't know if i've seen this one before brian - i like it... interesting choice to start each stanza with alliterative phrasing. it adds to the semi-surrealistic vision you've chosen as a vehicle for your metaphor. nicely done. C |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
I like this write Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Spectral shadow's bathe the mane of an ebony canine, gaily gnawing an abused bone. Suspiciously he stalks stifled skin, this congealed shroud of me. Blooded birth bares my petty nerve, it's servitude vows broken by celibate ceremony, the dog's tongue loosens love-lines, drawing us to a pacific epilogue. ================================= ONLY YOU could write about "bowels" and make it poetic....  Wow...this poem needs several reads to grasp all its poetic offerings.... love the vocab in this and all the alliterations youve in... and youve worked the extended metaphor and imagery till you created an edge on this unique write. So youre in trouble again huh? Write them a poem...it works everytime veery cool write Bri-babes. |
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Radrook Senior Member
since 2002-08-09
Posts 648 |
Interesting read! Very deep! Enjoyed! |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
lol@janetmarie...i'm with her on that "bowel" comment...lol interesting write brian..enjoyed.. hope your muse will rejoin you soon.. hugs, g "dont cry because its over, smile because it happened...!" -unknown |
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GOlDsparklESS Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 428central nj |
OoO chilly!  |
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