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My Dawn
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My Dawn |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
My Dawn when darkness overwhelms when fear upends when tears stream in sorrow’s weight You come You whisper I turn and see You, my first Light and day breaks into joyous possibilities because You have touched my dawn ©October 5, 2002 Now, I don't like the title because it puts more emphasis upon me rather than my First Light, but I don't want to give away the meat of the message in the title, soooooo, do you have a title suggestion? Whether on the shoal or on the shore, I'll seek the lighthouse evermore. [This message has been edited by VAS (10-05-2002 10:15 AM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
VAS, Good write, can't think of a title but if I do I'll let you know. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I think you just suggested another title yourself: "First Light" I liked this write! EA |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I like the title "First Light", too, but if you don't want to use that, what do you think of the title "YOU" ? Just an idea. I like your work very much. With Love, Ethel/garysgirl |
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