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Hello Above.........Serenity's Challange
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Hello Above.........Serenity's Challange |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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hello above I think you are or all around that star can’t say that I’ve not looked away a stray but I used to be Sunday’s child licking that gold star beside my name in school and every night I laid me down my soul what was that I didn’t know but didn’t want to die before I woke forsaken..no no I asked you to help me back then when I was ten with something bigger then I have known since put my hands out into the dark in my room with the closet I feared and asked just needed to know what to do and while I’m at the questioning I’ve been wondering about that angel I called Michelle you know she was special she was most for me a first big love and my prayer was big that day I know I’d faltered earlier and now I was in need all of a sudden I asked ..is that greed to take a child who was loved so dear this tear is all you gave to me in answer and still I ask how is this plan worked out I don’t mean any disrespect and I’m sure you know my heart is good believes in love and brotherhood and I appreciate all the little things you made for me to touch and I know one day beyond this time sense will make of me some semblance of what this time spent is meant to be until then just one thing for peace on earth goodwill to men could we get some help with this amen [This message has been edited by Martie (10-03-2002 11:56 PM).] |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Martie, I'm at a loss for words, to try and explain how touching this is (((hugs)))for you  |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"I don’t mean any disrespect and I’m sure you know my heart is good believes in love and brotherhood and doing onto others good and I appreciate all the little things you made for me to touch and I know one day beyond this time sense will make of me some semblance of what the time spent was meant to be"  (big hugggssssss) Oh Martie, this is soooo wonderfully heartfelt, sweet friend, I know with all my heart that your Michelle is safe in His embrace just as He holds the answers to man and He does have a plan that the only thing more we need is man's heart to listen and cooperate which only time can help establish, which then these circles of goodwill will spread! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is a fabulous challenge response, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Think you worked a bit of Job into this Jeremiah. The questioning here and this challenge, in general, seem to be stalking me tonight...lol. Is making me think. [This message has been edited by Duncan (10-04-2002 12:07 AM).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
my my my my mmmarvelous mmmartie? (I swear there is something French in me that makes me type: "marite") yes...you took this to the depths and beyond. Book of Job? Indeed. Jeremiad? I'll work pro-bono on your defense. What a gracious spirit, and generous, with your willing heart.  Thank you. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Most special... the poet the challenge the questions most special the answer that will come, one day... |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Martie - sweet poetess, this has touched me deeply. hugs to you, Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
My friend... the questions are ones certainly begging an answer...and ones you and I both know we'll have to wait to fully understand.. very skillfully written.. very touching.. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, Your writing always lifts the mist and shows the horizon. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Martie, this has such a ring of truth that I could hear you saying the words. Well done! |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
martie.......wow, don't know what I could say that hasn't been said......wonderful touching write....course everything you write is...sigh.. |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
rereading only brings more tears.....the honesty reaches the heart of me |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
to take a child who was loved so dear this tear is all you gave to me in answer and still I ask how is this plan worked out I don't mean any disrespect and I'm sure you know my heart is good believes in love and brotherhood and I appreciate all the little things you made for me to touch and I know one day beyond this time sense will make of me some semblance of what this time spent is meant to be until then just one thing for peace on earth goodwill to men could we get some help with this ===================================== Isnt just like you to ask for all of humanity and add in self humilty while asking the hearts hardest questions of why. The challenge was to "pitch a fit" ... you penned a prayer of pure poetry...I bet its gets heard first  |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
can’t say that I’ve not looked away a stray but I used to be Sunday’s child licking that gold star beside my name in school and every night I laid me down my soul what was that I didn’t know but didn’t want to die before I woke forsaken..no no Something about this verse just really speaks, that is not say that wole poem doesn't, it does and then some. Martie, these are powerful words, wonderfully written. El riesgo vive siempre! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Touching is an understatement our Cali Girl.. You wrote your heart into this poem... I can see that very easily from all which is within this.... Beautifully done dear one... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Thank you for your replies to this... I think when you're talking to God, it's best to write the truth and make it from the heart...and that's what I tried to do.  |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Came back for another read... still feeling the heart-tugs... still...knowing why the why is questioned... |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
oh, how utterly touching; lump in my throat and tears in my eyes......... .................................. without surrender, be on good terms with all persons... |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - I believe the spirit of love you approach has the same questions you ask - so often we reach out for answers only to find a tear, pain, aches and loss which the love spirit is feeling tha pain and crying too - Job and JEremiah have nothing that approaches the searching soul you share with us - lovely - Paul |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Hi Martie a beautifully met challenge sweet lady. I absolutely loved it. Maree |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Hello, Martie. There's no way that I could say any more than your other family of friends has already said. I only know that you did a very sincere job of pouring your heart out to God in this poem (prayer). Though none of us could even begin to try to explain the reason "why", I do feel that one day the answer will be known to you. The word of God says that our minds could not even comphehend if we knew all the mysteries of Him. I hope you feel all the love that's poured out to you from all your "family of friends". My heart goes out to you. Love, Ethel |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
No cries are quite as fervent as those of and for a child. This is beautiful. KJ Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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