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Take me Down
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Take me Down |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Take me Down Take me down to curled leaf, autumn falls, it falls along the edge and leans from the fence with the warped tomato. Pull out the weeping end of summer, its fragrance bites, though sweet the taste. Take me down into this cool morning, oh, sun, so layered in rising mist, and touch me sweatered. The bare shoulder has danced summer brown into folly’s open fire with a sing along and I can still hear it echo in the ripple. I see grace moving now in the rake, a piece of last October still stuck in its teeth, leaning against the turn of time watching the sky for the first dance of the Liquid Amber. Take me down with flannel sheets and the window open to cool the warmth of autumn nights with you. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, How lovely is a flower, if you can tell me that then you have my comment.  |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Thank you for taking me down this beautiful autumn path with you! You do have a wonderful and unique way of expressing yourself. Even if your name wasn't ascribed to this poem, I would have known it was written by you! EA |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You and your flannel sheets...and sweatered shoulder moments, and soft curl of smile...all encompassed in your writings... I am looking forward to the fall and winter writings of your pen, and your muse... |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Well said. Looking forward to my favorite time of year. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"Take me down with flannel sheets and the window open to cool the warmth of autumn nights with you."   (smiles) Awwwwww, this is so lovely, sweet friend, this is a beautiful romantic poem filled with serenity and sighs! (kiss on cheek) You always spread flowers across these pages, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Take me down into this cool morning, oh, sun, so layered in rising mist, and touch me sweatered. The bare shoulder has danced summer brown into folly’s open fire with a sing along and I can still hear it echo in the ripple. -------------------------------------------- Martie girl...this is perfect! Autumn, and sweaters, and flannel sheets...yes! So beautifully said..as only you can. ~Hugs dear poetess~ ~ Time has cast a spell on you |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
ah... softly poetic murmers...heralding the changes.. I enjoyed my friend as always |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Tis the perfect time of the year....when my AC bill isn't outta sight.....love those cool mornings....you paint the covers well.. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
The bare shoulder has danced summer brown into folly’s open fire with a sing along and I can still hear it echo in the ripple. I see grace moving now in the rake, a piece of last October still stuck in its teeth, leaning against the turn of time watching the sky for the first dance of the Liquid Amber. Martie, this is truly beautiful, soft and tender words. LOved it. El riesgo vive siempre! |
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Moonlight Romeo
since 2001-09-10
Posts 982The heart of you |
Autumn whispers what Fall cannot speak. Thank you. What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun. |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Martie, You never cease to amaze, your words are liquid, flowing, touched with insight, gripping, strands of that for which we strive, thanks to you we're more alive. Doc |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Martie only you make autumn sound so heavenly. Love the sweater and flannel sheets! A good snuggle on a cool night. Hugs, Marti |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Martie - Take me down with flannel sheets and the window open to cool the warmth of autumn nights with you. What warm words are these to comfort one on during an autumn night... BC |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
Graceful, is the word that comes to mind, a most graceful write. |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Martie, this is so lovely...a very peaceful write. I hate seeing the summer end, but autumn really is my favorite time of the year. *hugs* |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
your words caress the autumn air and whisper golden images - loved it Martie - Paul |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
A lovely Autumn poem, Martie! Especially loved the "warped tomato" line! cor |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
I've re-read your poem several times...each time the image of a warm sunny autumn day grows more vivid...beautifully conveyed ...believe what your heart feels..... |
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