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bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

0 posted 2002-10-02 04:52 PM

To Lori

Counting crescents of moon again.
Counting rocks of the hill.
Counting waves crashing over our shape
to remember the chill.

Bridling wastes of the wind again,
rising moon colored leaves.
Blotting timbre of wood river's voice.
Drowned words lack our reprieve.

Waxen wings glow red in the sun --
fly to touch forest's face.
Moon's jealousy will not ready swoon.
We must take her place.

Sighting names off the walk again.
Lifted from granite rows.
The taste of lips has turned tragedy.
October, a personal glow.

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

1 posted 2002-10-02 04:56 PM

Bridling wastes of the wind again,
rising moon colored leaves.
Blotting timbre of wood river's voice.
Drowned words lack our reprieve.

Waxen wings glow red in the sun --
fly to touch forest's face.
Moon's jealousy will not ready swoon.
We must take her place.
====================================

what you do with rhyme and imagery always takes me mothy breath away...
Lori inspires you in such lovely ways.

In the space between now and then
I lost the fire, lost a friend
and Ill never be the same again
Still, I believe in the innocence
we gave away.

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

2 posted 2002-10-02 05:01 PM

Lori is one lucky lady to have such beautiful poems penned for her.
We must get you to Calgary!
~Hugs to you both~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
So you won't ever forget me ~

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

3 posted 2002-10-02 05:09 PM

Thank you both. God willing...

caterina
Member

since 2002-07-25

Posts 188
Canada

4 posted 2002-10-02 05:32 PM

I have read a lot of poems at PIP and marvel at the talent here. Your poems are always beautiful and full of fresh images, and you write so many. I am wondering... how do you do it? I mean they always seem so new, nothing stale or overused. Do you ever run out of thoughts? I hope not because it is a pleasure to read your work.

Thankyou and I look forward to more.

caterina

Tiersdin
Member Elite

since 2000-11-17

Posts 2364
east coast

5 posted 2002-10-02 06:29 PM

Love looks good on you, Mikey, sweet poem!

*smiles*
~Tier

"I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..."

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

6 posted 2002-10-02 08:53 PM

Tier is right,
as is caterinas' wonderment.

But, let's not lose the spiders and bones completely. Some things are counted on.

Loved it, Mikey (poor gentle squirrel dude)

~Ed

brian madden
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 4374
ireland

7 posted 2002-10-02 09:05 PM

Mike, wonderful as always.

Sighting names off the walk again.
Lifted from granite rows.
The taste of lips has turned tragedy.
October, a personal glow.

El riesgo vive siempre!

Krishankins

Senior Member

since 2002-06-23

Posts 972
Texas

8 posted 2002-10-02 10:02 PM

Impressive piece Mike!! (Like that's a surprise!)

Hey dog, did you see the size of that chicken!?

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

9 posted 2002-10-02 10:30 PM

Touching and vibrant write. ThisDiamond

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

10 posted 2002-10-02 10:35 PM

"Counting waves crashing over our shape
to remember the chill. "

*sigh*
diggin this one

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

11 posted 2002-10-02 11:47 PM

(smiles) Oh Michael, this is so beautiful, sweet friend, Lori is so lucky to have you as I too wish you both the best happiness and to make magic of the night and take the moons place! (big huggsssss) This is touching, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Michael, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Anvrill
Senior Member

since 2002-06-21

Posts 710
in the interzone now

12 posted 2002-10-03 01:35 AM

S'not fair! Another October without you.... Baby, I so want you to be here for the fall. The most beautiful time ever to have been imagined, when I'm just so alive and the world is so alive even as it seems to be holding it's breath and waiting to die...

There's just something in the air; the hypertension before a thunder storm. Electricity in yours veins. A time to go wild and be unafraid.

And I want you with me in our own private wilderness, sitting under the sky of a Halloween night.

your tongue's like poison
so swollen it fills up my mouth

rs

Beki
Senior Member

since 1999-09-15

Posts 1569
Newport Beach, CA, USA

13 posted 2002-10-03 04:12 AM

what lovely imagery is here - I especially like the line:

"Blotting timbre of wood river's voice."

nice read

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

14 posted 2002-10-03 09:13 AM

good stuff Mikey...as usual.

held some strong images and allusions when I read this...you continue to impress with not only the depths but the quality of what you share.

Elizabeth

Moderator

Member Ascendant

since 1999-06-07

Posts 6871
Minnesota

15 posted 2002-10-03 11:36 AM

OK, that does it. I read Lori's comment and you have to get to Calgary. Halloween is still plenty of time away so start planning now! Good luck to you guys!

God bless America, my home sweet home.

Elizabeth

Moderator

Member Ascendant

since 1999-06-07

Posts 6871
Minnesota

16 posted 2002-10-03 11:38 AM

aw stupid old me forgot to check the library button so I can save this one lol

God bless America, my home sweet home.

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

17 posted 2002-10-03 01:11 PM

Caterina,
I just listen, and the ideas are there.
(second answer: go find my poem
Where I Get My Ideas
for a different take)
Thanks for enjoyin'!

Thanks, Robin.

Thank you, Ed. I've got a reputation to maintain. Heh heh.

Thanks, brian!

Kris, always glad to see your comments. Thanks for that reply.

Thank you, ThisDiamond.

Susan, I thought you might.

Thanks, Noah.

*kiss* Baby, you write poetry! I like to think of it this way: this is the LAST October we'll ever be apart... I miss you, babygrrl. God, I do.

Thank you, Beki.

Ron, thanks to you for critiquing the original version, when it was just called Forever.

Thanks, Liz. Twice.

Moonlight Romeo

Senior Member

since 2001-09-10

Posts 982
The heart of you

18 posted 2002-10-03 01:27 PM

When Octobers go, there only remains the love.

Thank you.

What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun.

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

19 posted 2002-10-03 01:54 PM

Mike

Fresh wonder and turning of the color of love.

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

20 posted 2002-10-03 04:35 PM

Moonlight Romeo,
Martie,

Thank you both for your kind replies.

Charisma

Member Ascendant

since 2000-09-30

Posts 5906
lost in blue pages

21 posted 2002-10-04 04:38 PM

breathless piece....enjoyed it a lot

Charisma

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

22 posted 2002-10-04 07:04 PM

Thank you.

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

23 posted 2002-10-04 07:17 PM

Michael, I know what you are feeling with the separation from your Lori. My Gary and I are apart right now, too. It looks like you have found true love, though, so when you do see each other it will be SOOOOOOO sweet!!! Best Wishes to you both, Ethel.....garysgirl

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

24 posted 2002-10-05 12:59 PM

Thank you, Ethel, for your kind wishes. Much luck to you and yours, too.

ecrivan
Member Elite

since 2001-12-10

Posts 3923
my own state

25 posted 2002-10-06 01:13 AM

capturing tender moments nicely

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

26 posted 2002-10-07 11:52 AM

Thanks, ecrivan.

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