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Cpat Hair
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0 posted 2002-10-02 10:23 AM



So the words are still there
Churning aggregate against
A worn cylinder spun
To be poured out
And settle in forms

But I have never danced
With Iambe on sawdust floor
Or paddled stream
With lustful ending
Under spreading bluff
And may never again
Even dream of such
As the binding
Quick-limed media
Hardens even now

We have shared
Cared to share

Stories told with tears
That stained sheets velum fine
Leaving watermarks of their own
On records of who constructed
Who designed
Who maintained

Clinging grime
From sacks dumped into stiff breeze
Forcing back onto our skin
Irritating dust once packaged
Sewn tightly
Or folded and glued
Like the words now are upon
This page

There may be need to mix
More ideas and thoughts together
In the churning spinning worn
Cylinder

But for now
I wait for the swan
To find the pools already created
And filled with all the liquid wants
Desired in dreams
That are not
Were not
But constructions
Architected
To fill an empty space

Swans do not sing
But I think their song
Is being sung to me

© Copyright 2002 Cpat Hair - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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1 posted 2002-10-02 10:25 AM



The beauty of silent song
as can only be heard
by a true admirer of a long lost soul
is that which is felt,
like a breeze on the heart...

only a few,
only a very few,
understand it's true significance...

and are truly blessed.

caterina
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2 posted 2002-10-02 10:43 AM



I have read some of your other poems and I must say that I really like how your thoughts just blend so nicely and easily into each stanza...keeping focused is something that I have to pay attention to.  But you, it seems to come naturally or does it?  I sometimes wonder if it just comes more naturally to some and for others it is a struggle.  

Anyway, just wanted to let you know that I enjoyed this and it ended it on a nice note.  I always have trouble with endings.

Thanks for sharing,

caterina


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3 posted 2002-10-02 11:02 AM


Sunshine... sometimes the not hearing is indeed the listening we have to do... thanks for your words..and what I think they infer.

Caterina: When I write, the thoughts are already there, meaning they have formed themselves and my act of writing them is only formalizing into words what I feel or want to describe. Perhaps the flow you speak of is easier for me than some. My work demands I connect the dots ( so to speak) making sure things flow one into the other.
I appreciate your comments and thank you very much for the kind words...

ThisDiamond
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4 posted 2002-10-02 11:08 AM


So well, to know the urging on of open dreams, and waiting realities. Usually, I find you here to lift me, today I found a prize that is special and understood.
The best is yet to come. ThisDiamond

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5 posted 2002-10-02 11:12 AM


"Swans do not sing
But I think their song
Is being sung to me"




(sigh) This is so very true, sweet friend, and I know lightly as a feather these pearls from beyond the dreams depths will find a way to you! (big hugggsssss) This is marvelous, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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6 posted 2002-10-02 11:23 AM


This left me feeling somewhat melancholy..
not too sure why,...but it did.
I admire the way you write.
Much enjoyed.
~Hugs~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
  So you won't ever forget me ~

Martie
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7 posted 2002-10-02 12:05 PM


Ron

Swans do sing...their voice could be silence, or a breath...something that touches without touching.  I hear it in this poem.

Earth Angel
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8 posted 2002-10-02 01:21 PM


"Songs do not sing
But I think" your song sings to me.

Lovely.

EA

Seymour Tabin
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9 posted 2002-10-02 01:34 PM


Cpat,
A wonderful write with much continum, enjoyed.

Tiersdin
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10 posted 2002-10-02 02:14 PM


Are you sure you're without a swan's voice yourself?

beautiful song...

~Tier

"I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..."

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11 posted 2002-10-02 04:18 PM


Ron,
Like trying to swim in a river
before the cement is poured.

wranx
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12 posted 2002-10-02 05:40 PM


Damn, but that was fine.
I admire the competency of your writing as much as the thought that drives it.
(presuming that you even give these things, thought)


~Ed

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