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Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration

0 posted 2002-10-02 07:51 AM


Somewhere More Familiar
©2002 C.G. Ward


the scrape of teeth
over tongues of sorrow;
we are wistful
to believe our worlds collided
in this time of fleeting joy.

entwined,
naked sweat:
skin slicks memories
while we speak of words
as if the taste of sex
could feed an army of fools.

take me now,
wandering across the string
- stretching -
between your smile
and the roll of my eyes.
clip a phrase
and call it droll;
we can balance desires
over a distance
that's never touched ground,
if you blend chastity with breakfast
and remind me to eat.

our world isn't clean,
it reeks of reality
and the pressures
of trying to find a place
where we can slip
a knuckle-hilt grip
into the knot of hope.

come tomorrow,
I'll be clinging to this silence
that buries a bone
into the quickness of your breath.


[This message has been edited by Christopher (10-02-2002 09:17 AM).]

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Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

1 posted 2002-10-02 09:27 AM


take me now,
wandering across the string
- stretching -
between your smile
and the roll of my eyes.
clip a phrase
and call it droll;
we can balance desires
over a distance
that's never touched ground,
if you blend chastity with breakfast
and remind me to eat.
=================================
come tomorrow,
I'll be clinging to this silence
that buries a bone
into the quickness of your breath
but only to hear you sigh.
===================================

"we can balance desires
over a distance
that's never touched ground,
if you blend chastity with breakfast

~~~

I'll be clinging to this silence
that buries a bone"


~~~

damn.....sometimes a moth just dont know what to say...sometimes words would be wasted...sometimes I just want to let the moment be...

thank you for one of those moments.  

[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (10-02-2002 09:29 AM).]

ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353
Michigan, USA
2 posted 2002-10-02 10:23 AM


Extroooordinary!
Exceptional verse, powerful, riveting...
Extremely good. ThisDiamond

caterina
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since 2002-07-25
Posts 188
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3 posted 2002-10-02 10:56 AM



You are quite talented Chris, I have read some of your other poems and I like the style that you have.  I hope I can get my act together and be able to write as well as you and others that I have read since being at PIP.

I enjoyed.

caterina



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with you
4 posted 2002-10-02 10:58 AM


Kissy Face,

ok, you know I think you are a phenomenal writer, but wow! you gave me chills here...


"entwined,
naked sweat:
skin slicks memories
while we speak of words
as if the taste of sex
could feed an army of fools.

take me now,
wandering across the string
- stretching -
between your smile
and the roll of my eyes.
clip a phrase
and call it droll;
we can balance desires
over a distance
that's never touched ground,
if you blend chastity with breakfast
and remind me to eat."

(and I won't tell anyone I saw you rhyming just a bit )

Tiersdin
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Posts 2364
east coast
5 posted 2002-10-02 02:28 PM


Beautiful writing, Chris, romantically inspiring!

~Tier

"I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..."

Greeneyes
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6 posted 2002-10-02 09:58 PM


Christopher~


familiar, dont ya love that word, and
feeling? of course you do..

entwined naked sweat''
skin slick memories
while we speak of words
as if the taste of sex
could feed an army of fools

Bravo, the face tone of emotion
in that one stanza wow !!


take me now,''
wandering across the string
- stretching -
between your smile
and the roll of my eyes.
clip a phrase
and call it droll;

between all smiles of lovers lies
that look that can be so desirable


balance desires
over  a distance"


Wow I so understand that!!

our world isn't clean,
it reeks of reality
and the pressures
of trying to find a place
where we can slip
a knuckle-hilt grip
into the knot of hope.

come tomorrow,
I'll be clinging to this silence
that buries a bone
into the quickness of your breath.


I love the plain truth in this...and the longing feelings it holds....


of course I am a little bias to you....you are indeed talent!! and it shows every time you place your
words here....I like each style you write in, and most surely each emotion you grant....be well you...hugssss



Lauren~


I need some distraction
...oh beautiful release
Memories seep from my veins

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (10-02-2002 09:59 PM).]

brian madden
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Posts 4374
ireland
7 posted 2002-10-02 10:10 PM


Chris, I am still musing over this poem to say anything else except fantastic,
a truly fantastic piece.

El riesgo vive siempre!

FuzzyFrazzledFraggle
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since 2002-09-20
Posts 155
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8 posted 2002-10-02 10:56 PM


I know I'm not going to sound too orginal on this one..but yes I agree fantastic..loved it obviously

Consider yourself fuzzed

Severn
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since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

9 posted 2002-10-03 01:13 AM


getting there, getting there...

heart-hugs you

me

Duncan
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10 posted 2002-10-03 01:18 AM


we can balance desires
over a distance
that's never touched ground,
if you blend chastity with breakfast
and remind me to eat.

Chris, you have no idea how much I wish I could've written this.
Ya know someday, I'm going to lie and say I knew ya when.  And wish I had.  I could've quoted the whole poem but finally after several reads, setled on what caught in my gut.

Sandpiper
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since 2002-06-15
Posts 738
land of flora and fauna
11 posted 2002-10-03 08:22 PM


I toss a rose upon your stage, excellent!
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