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To My Warrior Poet
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To My Warrior Poet |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
Thou, my longed for Warrior Poet, Thou, who nightly haunts my fevered dreams, I long to meet thee by daylight, my fever cooled by the slow rush of water as we walk together by some gentle stream. The autumnal trees would smile as they rain their crimson windsong upon us while we stroll beneath thinning branches. If by chance you took my hand in yours you would discover my trembling pulse, quickened by both the season and your breath, close enough for me to feel whisperwarm on my cheek. Thou, my dreamed of Warrior Poet, Thou, who fills my waking hours with need, I long to meet thee, face to face, come out of my dreams to stand by my side. If only thee were more than an apparition born of my solitude and lonliness, I could sing with those smiling trees, My heart made lighter by your presence. I would feel both cherished and protected, held close within the circle of your sweet embrace. But alas, thou be only a dream, a fantasy that yet eludes me like morning's first dewfresh kiss. 09/29/02 |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"My heart made lighter by your presence. I would feel both cherished and protected, held close within the circle of your sweet embrace. But alas, thou be only a dream, a fantasy that yet eludes me like morning's first dewfresh kiss."   (big hugggssssss) Oh Rebecca, it will happen, sweet friend, and when that day comes nothing will elude you and the love of your warrior will be ever strong! (sigh) This is wonderful, sweet friend, I'm so happy you're posting again, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Rebecca, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Excellent verse, Beki. Do you consider this the final draft? This poem is so well-written, I'd hate to watch it wash away. You have a few stutters in the meter that slows the poem down in points. Read it aloud to yourself, and make the changes you feel fit that way. I'm really enjoying your words of late. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Sometimes we have to make our own fantasies into reality - and sometimes that reality supersedes our greatest dreams... This is great work, Beki - It's wonderful to see you here again, btw...  |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
Bsquirrel - I do consider it finished, I never post anything that is in progress. I am curious how the meter stumbles when I wasn't using any - wrote it in free verse. Perhaps it has a meter of its own but if so, how could that stumble? I have read it aloud, often, and it sounds wonderful to me. I would be curious to hear how you are reading it aloud, must be different than I do I am also curious about your comment about enjoying my words of late - do I know you? This is the first I have posted here in probably over a year......Nan - hello! I am so glad you found and read this! It is nice to be back, reading work by some very familiar names that I have missed. Thanks for commenting my friend |
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