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BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

0 posted 2002-10-01 02:05 AM

Write to me in long hand
slanting upwards
brushed across the page.

Scribble quick and draw me out
leaning to the right on wings
flying higher still.

Think of me in free verse
without rhyming any words
leaving thoughts to ponder you
in captions all alone.

Starting at the end
write my wrongs and prove me right
turn the pages over and read me back again;
capture me in chapter one
after knowing what you know
reworded if you will.

Stay that way
true to form and mean it,
like I mean to
sincerely,
honest and truly
duly noted
to my muse~~~

Krishankins

Senior Member

since 2002-06-23

Posts 972
Texas

1 posted 2002-10-01 02:29 AM

WOW!! This is a VERY GOOD write!! I would quote the lines I liked the best, but they were ALL good!!
Another for the library!!

Hey dog, did you see the size of that chicken!?

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

2 posted 2002-10-01 03:17 AM

Lori,
You know...you just keep getting better. How's life?

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

3 posted 2002-10-01 11:41 AM

duly noted...

enjoyed this my friend... as I usually do enjoy your work, no big surprise...but like the tone and images especially well here.

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

4 posted 2002-10-01 11:42 AM

duly noted...

enjoyed this my friend... as I usually do enjoy your work, no big surprise...but like the tone and images especially well here.

Christopher

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-02

Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration

5 posted 2002-10-01 04:17 PM

quote:
Think of me in free verse
without rhyming any words

amen sister! rofl

ok, really, this is a cute, (understandable) poem, but i have been flipping through the forums for the past half hour... wondering if we could have a day of non-rhyming, just so's i could actually reply to people i like with sincerity!

just not in the mood for rhyme of late.

thanks for feeding that.

C

[This message has been edited by Christopher (10-01-2002 04:18 PM).]

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

6 posted 2002-10-01 11:21 PM

(smiles) Oh Lori, this is wonderful, sweet friend, I always love your wonderful notes and melodies you write of, this is excellent, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lori, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

7 posted 2002-10-01 11:30 PM

BluesSerenade - I would write one in long hand about you if I could just figure out how to do it on this #$^*^%&(*&^$%&#$^ keyboard...

BC

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

8 posted 2002-10-02 12:48 PM

hey there...missed your words...will catch up with you later

hugs
M

Tracey
Member Elite

since 2001-08-29

Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding

9 posted 2002-10-02 07:29 AM

I really like the metaphor you’ve used Lori. Getting to know someone is like reading a book…getting to know them better with each chapter that unfolds, and writing them into the memory of our mind and heart.

You can never win or lose
If you don't
Run the race

Psychedelic Furs - Love My Way

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