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Open Poetry #22

Faux Shower

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

0 posted 2002-09-29 11:44 AM

Faux Shower

I awoke
to gentle, balmy breezes
caressing the morn
to life--
yet, now they’ve
turned blustery
salting the patio
and yard
with autumn’s dressing
of yellow, gold
and orange.

They’ve rattled
the cloth gazebo,
shaken the
caterpillar-headed
grass,
and peppered the air
with speckles
in the rain of seed
and leaf.

It’s almost
as if it’s
a shower of drought,
for the air
is bone dry,
save a tiny sense
of humidity
in the clouds
rolling by.

Puddles of leaves
and seeds
increase their depth,
but the land
remains in thirst,
in a mock autumn
shower
as the sky,
with leaf,
does burst.

©September 29, 2002

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Miah
Senior Member

since 2002-08-26

Posts 1062
Pennsylvania

1 posted 2002-09-29 12:16 PM

Vas,
How lovely this is. I especially liked this line. "I awoke
to gentle, balmy breezes
caressing the morn
to life--"

Thanks for the read.

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

2 posted 2002-09-29 12:43 PM

"I awoke
to gentle, balmy breezes
caressing the morning
to life--"

I don't believe I have ever heard one's rising expressed more beautifully than you have just done!

This poem held my interest throughout!

Well done!

EA

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