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From a cracked pen (my challenge)
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From a cracked pen (my challenge) |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855
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My Muse (it must be said) does not dispel light into offered pleasures, a fragrance of song. She's fine just sitting there, pen and scissors pair, a mad mess of ideas taking notes and throwing sculptures without grace or explanation. She is not named among the greats. She forgets to comb her hair. I am the right silence to remember her by. Calliope gives no tablets to scribe lands I have not seen. Clio plays no rousing call; nor divines wreath leaves for me. Erato plucks no arrow at me, or a rose to give me pause. Euterpe works no songs I find to reconcile flaws. Melpomene shows not her dagger; I do not know yet how to bleed. Terpsichore dances by leaving florid thoughts to seed. Thalia leaves mask unmoved; I do not make her laugh or wonder. Urania nurses no care to the stars I write in ponder. Polyhymnia stays not my hand against the hymn of words. And Mnemosyne never whispers of deeds I can shape to swords. And yet, against all sense, these tired dribblings from a cracked pen continue to stain these sheets by drops. [This message has been edited by bsquirrel (09-25-2002 05:38 PM).] |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
That was amazing. The imagery was vivid. If this is your muse being disagreeable, I'll be very jealous if it ever decides to cooperate with you.  Kielo |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
(chuckling) Mike you do well with the challenge... I enjoyed this. I personally composed a couple of replies to your challenge in my head..then shook it quickly so they would fall out as they were far more tired and trite than any dribblings from a cracked pan you have shared here... |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
This is awesome as usual Mikey. I love it Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Your Muse of Unruly Hair sounds perfect...this is a  .... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Could I borrow your Muse for a bit? I'd pay her well---she'd be worth any price! ~ This was brilliant! ~ Linda |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Kielo, She, not it.  Thank you.Ron, oh, I doubt anything you have to say would be trite. Tired is fine.  Julie, thank you. Karilea, I love seeing that little jumpin' letter guy pop up.Linda, She works for cookies! (and, apparently, when I eat lunch late!) C'mon, baby, c'mon darling, |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
I can only say that I love it. I've never done any challenges, but I will attempt this one... excellent work, Mikey... ~Tier "I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..." |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
From a racked pen (Mike's challenge) My Muses Putricene beckons vulture and rat, to sup upon my verbage. Saccarin hides not my bitter pense, nor sweetens any reverie. Cadaverene wafts willfullyaround my meager writings, gifting each with stifling stench. Anathema makes dust, my ink; brittle straw, my quill. ~Ed [This message has been edited by wranx (09-26-2002 01:19 AM).] |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
ok you win Mike I have run out of "clever" ways of saying: you wraht gud this is not only 1. a great poem 2. an apt poem 3. a learn-ed poem but also 4. more evidence of your need to challenge yourself --- and pass with rainbows awesome and ED? deselfwitprecatetying |
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Anvrill Senior Member
since 2002-06-21
Posts 710in the interzone now |
Hon? Yr muse sounds like me on a ditzy-creative day. Sprawled out on the floor in a pile of art supplies, more hair in my mouth and eyes than in any place it's supposed to be, way-too-baggy hair-dye stained cotton t-shirt, and old decaying jeans. Although I don't think I work for cookies... So yr muse is cheaper than me. Though I do seem t' inspire you at least as often as she does, huh? *kiss*I love that muses are shes, btw. Women rock! I wanna grow up to be a seductress, k? K. your tongue's like poison |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
My cracked pen is in awe of yours This is superb! Liz |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
yep, amazing stuff in this, and it's stuffed to the gills with amazing lines and images! your cracked pen must be causing a chain reaction in all directions, resulting in an explosion of thoughts to paint rainbows of images for all to see Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
FANTASTICALLY WRITTEN... regards, sudhir |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Tiersdin, Please do attempt the challenge. I'm glad you enjoyed. Wranx, Awww.... Y'know what? That was actually really well-written, despite yr deflatin' ego. brian, Thank you. And you never run out of ways to say things in new lights. Lorigrrl, Yes, women do rock. And the corrolaries between my muse and you are strictly intentional. Finally,"I wanna grow up to be a seductress." If that's not cute enough, you then follow it with k?  God I missed ya!  Thank you, E.S. I appreciate yr comments. Thanks, VAS. That's very sweet of you to say. Sudhir, As are your poems, Sudhir. As are yours. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Very interesting.....like your work...maybe it's because I'm weirder than you are?....LOL....all your stuff is very interesting squirrely one.... |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thank you, Mr. Toe.Weirder than me, eh? I don't doubt it, strangely. |
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